What do you do?

I like the repetition with a slight twist at the beginnimg and end of the poem. It's a lovely first piece, I hope to see more of your poetry!

Ooh I liked this. A very clever poem.

Radrook here a once again to offer some suggestions.
Apologies if i offend. It isn’t my intention.
Please feel full free to cast aside all things you deem not helpful.
But if you do be sure its true by being extra careful.

That having been said:

Thanks for sharing this poem. I enjoy cryptic poetry although it really isn't my style. That you strive to make your poem profound and to have multiple meanings is indeed commendable. So the advice below is to help you in your quest.

Please note that cryptic writing uses symbols in order to make common concepts vague. In other words cryptic writing describes things in a roundabout way by using imagery with a meaning that isn't immediately obvious.

In short, it provides the reader with tangible images to work with. Otherwise the reader has no clue and having no clues at all can lead to simply reading something else. So in order to retain a reader's interest, a hope of a definite understanding is best provided.

The following advice is very relevant:

So, you want to know how to write using symbolgy? Cryptic stylings?

1. First think about what symbolizes something else. Plug blunt statements like (A) Happiness and = (B) to it. Think outside of the box. The further you go, the more cryptic it can be.

For example… I wouldn’t say happiness= sunshine (cliché!) people are going to know off the bat how you are feeling. I would try, happiness= icy bits of snowflakes, chamomile tea, sweatpants, twirling whirling colors sparking on my skin, soap, matches, so on…

2. Then plug it into your works. Poetry is something that can further your skill. Here is a poem that is not cryptic.

I find the sun smiles
My heart beats with it too
The summer air doddle’s
I write your songs on my shoe
Yawn fest, right? Rhyming unless in lyrical writing (song writing) can give it away quick. Unrhyming poetry tends to add a more cryptic air to it. The above poem is about a happy day, in the summer; the dude is in love and writes her poems on his shoe…

I find the curve inverted( another way of saying smile, inverted frown)
Angles kiss her on cheek (dimples)
Heat makes me beg for ignition (talking about the slowing ways of summer)
My blood pump umbrellas my night (heartbeats shades him, keeps him alive)
I write fire semantics, (words with meaning!)
Humming humidity (heavy songs)
I vex your complexion (another way to say she blushed, he vexed he complexion)
The fire is now in you (the fire in his words is now in her cheeks, she is blushing.)

2.Expression... adjectives and artistic ways of expression. Don’t say I am sad. Say the grey is venting in black. The morning star is bruised… Take the world around you and use it to express something inside of you. If a woman was talking about a man she is trapped by, she could say: the ribcage smothers me, it would be better to be formed from dust. (women were made of the rib, man from the earth)

3. Read cryptic things and decipher them with other people. Shakespeare talks a lot in symbolism. I can’t stand the man, but he is good for learning how to use words in ways people have to ponder on .

4.Finally, don’t learn or use big words that are not natural to you, but instead learn more words. The more words you know, the better you will be manipulating them. The more things you learn about the world you live in, the better you will be at finding things that equal to them.

Hello, my name is Ayat. I love your work! Although I can not quite place my finger on the exact message or point you are trying to get across, I do have a few lines that I personally related to.
"What we do, nothing's changed"
"Time would tell, but we won't know"
"One last time, let's try again,
but it stops there, nothing more to be said"
I love the way the structure of this poem is. It is a very organized way of placing your thoughts. I personally have trouble organizing my thoughts and words like that. I admire that.
I would love to know the inspiration behind this poem, and maybe how long it took you to write it?
As always thank you for taking the time to read my review and publishing your amazing work! Keep writing! ~a

Please feel free to ignore my advice it is not meant to hurt or offend you or demean you in anyway or make your poem seem bad. That said brace yourself

1. Clarity
Okay first of all, I noticed it doesn't seem like it's exactly clear what this is talking about. This line
But what we see, we can't forsee,
for you see, it's not meant to be.
Further adds to the confusion. I for one would probably add another line, or redo the others, that make it clear what this is about. Okay so I know this is about going through hard times and waiting for a break from them, but I expect to others it might not be so clear.
other then that I can't find any other problem so nice work!
Oh and a late welcome to YWS