Prime Target: Chapter 1 - locked doors

by JustMeBeingMe

Published April 22, 2026

E - Everyone

In Prime Target

“Where’s Yaakov Chaim?” Moshe stormed into the house, a tornado with a backpack. “There was police and he wasn’t there the whole day.”

“Yeah, where’s Mikey?” His father echoed.

After an unfortunate accident five years back involving a menorah, a microphone and an explosion, Yaakov Chaim Abram had become Mikey. Only his older brother Moshe still hung onto the old name.

“I even went to ask his creepy teacher. Mr Erdos. He said he wasn’t there.”

Rachel sighed. This was not how she had planned to tell them. “Mikey’s had to go into protection for a while,” she said slowly. “He witnessed something. A crime.”

“Oh,” said Moshe through a face full of egg salad, “then I’ll have the bedroom to myself.”

Mr Abram gave Rachel a significant look. “Why didn’t you call me?”

“I didn’t want to bother you,” she says foolishly. Stupid, stupid.

“Ah. Well, this is our son. I’d like to think I can be bothered for him. I mean, I’m a freelance guitarist, not a… a…” he thought furiously. “A fighter pilot. I’m available!” He breathed deeply for a full minute. “I forgive you. Now, where is Mikey?”

Mikey was still out of it. He was in a building called the Frustum, but he didn’t know it. There were a ridiculous number of floors, each one slightly smaller than the one below it. Three months earlier, in a big round office three levels above Mikey’s soft grey prison, there had been a team meeting.

Three months earlier

Amelie was wearing her Dior x Air Jordan 1 High OG grey sneakers. This was a pair that made her feel like a sci-fi warrior, a woman dressed to kill – literally. She tapped her foot, clad in $9,740.58 worth of sneaker, impatiently as she waited for her colleagues - underlings, really - to silence.

“Planning will now commence,” she said when they wouldn’t be quiet. “You are here because Mikey Abram has now turned fifteen. Mikey Abram is this.”

She clicked a remote and an image appeared on the projector. A teenage boy with the face of a child, a kippah on his brown hair.

“Some of you will never have heard of Project Big Brother, so I’m supposed to update you. The idea is to keep track of talent, because talent is dangerous and useful. There’s this AI, the Big Brother, and it, like, flags children with high BDNF numbers-”

“That doesn’t sound right,” Peters, a blond New Zealander with a medical background pointed out. “BDNF is one noisy piece of a much bigger puzzle. It’s involved in synaptic plasticity, but a blood level doesn’t tell us how smart someone is. And that’s without the ethical concerns.”

“Wow, did you google that all by yourself? Anyone who thinks it is ethical to let a kid know the secrets of your respective governments can remove themselves from the room immediately.”

“I’ll stay put,” said Peters unnecessarily, and stayed put.

“As I was saying. They don’t work straight from BDNF numbers, by the way. The AI factors in a bunch of geeky genetic stuff and the exceptional kids get offered free therapy and science summer camps so it can track them. But I’m being boring.”

“You are,” someone said.

“Wow, so smart you’re like a walking encyclopedia. Now. That kid on the screen, when he turned fifteen, the Big Brother techs were going to remove him from the potential-threat list. To test his emotional development, they gave him a math problem that cannot be solved. And whaddaya know, he solved it, and now he’s our problem.”

There was a rumble of conversation across the room. Amelie stalked to the door of the room, hit an intercom, and was met almost immediately by a secretary with a stack of binders and some mustard.

She passed out the binders and opened the mustard. Some lucky individuals who had never had the misfortune of watching Amelie’s eating habits were staring at her anxiously.

She squirted mustard on her fingers, then licked it off fastidiously. Wiped her hands on a tissue. Snapped open the binder.

“Read it,” she urged. “Read the information. We’re going to capture this kid. Find out how he broke the algorithm. Then we find a way to defuse him. Any questions?”

Present day

Mikey was hungry. Mikey was tired. Mikey’s arm was hurting, and so was the rest of him. Arthritic flare-up.

The walls were covered with velcroed grey padding. So was the floor. The room was a perfect cube, completely smooth except for strip lights and a single panel- Mikey guessed that was the door. He crawled over to it though his joints were screeching. Pushed it. Locked, of course.

The situation didn’t bother him much. It was like being in a dream: nothing to worry about, just an empty buffer of time without an apparent end. Peaceful, almost. He didn’t know how much time had passed; maybe he wasn’t in Ottawa anymore. But the police would take care of everything. He lay back on the padded floor and hummed tunelessly.

In a big round office three levels above the soundproof room, Amelie was going over their respective roles.

“PR and keeping family Abram happy: Wilson, De Leon, Kaur. Good job so far.”

Eloise Kaur blushed at the rare compliment, and Amelie pretended not to notice, handing out the technical roles.

“Standby field agents: Levy, Norton, Singh. There’s also unit 56 at your disposal, if plans A, B and C fail.”

“Unit 56?” That was Levy, an outspoken young American. “Sir- I mean Madame – um, why do we need an anti-terrorism unit?”

“Because, my dear madame – I mean sir,” Amelie rejoined, “Classified information only stays Eyes Only for so long. Sooner or later we’ll have China and Russia on to him. This cipher is a big deal. As I’ve been saying for weeks.”

Levy shrugged, unabashed. You got used to Amelie when you worked for the Frustum.

“And that brings us on to Arthur Emerson, the cipher expert, straight from England. Welcome to the Frustum.”

“Much obliged,” said the silver-haired Emerson with a polite nod.

“Last add-on,” Amelie sighed, playing with a mustard bottle. “I fought long and hard with the big bosses. I said FVEY is big enough and secrets are secrets. But they said no, Israel’s joining the team or there is no team. So we’re getting Noam Regev, psychologist. He’s not here yet – here he is. Perfect timing, dude.”

Regev was lithe and tan, with green-brown eyes and black hair, cut short. He was looking around the room approvingly. Satisfied, he leaned against a wall.

“Nice room,” Regev said with a smile. “What did I miss?”

“Nothing,” muttered Levy.

“Last-minute briefing.” Amelie put down the bottle. “Now it’s go time. Whenever you’re ready, Regev…”

Movement caught Mikey’s eye. The door was opening slowly, unobtrusively.

“Hello,” said the man, without coming in. “I’m Noam. I brought you meds for your flare-up.” He held up a cup of water and a blister pack. “Want some?”

“No,” Mikey said. “You’re a stranger and they were talking about drugs.”

“Back at the police station? Yes, they were. But I think you’ve realised that drugs aren’t involved here.”

“Can I see the packaging?” Mikey scooted over to the door. Took the box, examined it.

Tylenol. “Good. I can’t have ibuprofen because that won’t work with my meds.”

Regev nodded and smiled blankly. Mikey popped a pill and drank the water. After that they were both quiet, each waiting for the other to speak.

“If I didn’t witness a drug related crime,” Mikey said suddenly, “Why are you keeping me here?”

Noam knew he was cleared to reveal this, but it felt wrong to say it. “RSA.”

“That’s not an explanation.”

“Didn’t Wilson – I mean, the guy in the police station – explain it to you?”

“Explain it, no. I wasn’t listening.”

“You know more about the actual mathematics than I do, Mikey. What you’re missing is the significance. You know in the early days of computing, banks would have operatives travelling to all their branches with suitcases full of keys, so that they could communicate in code? Most codes need a key to be exchanged. And it’s very, very expensive to fly across the world just to hand out keys.

“That’s where Rivest, Shamir and Adelson come in. They made an algorithm, a system of key exchange, that is asymmetric. It doesn’t involve transporting any secret information.1 That’s been in use for years.”

“What has that got to do with me- oh. Oh. The homework from Science Camp.”

“Yes, Mikey. The homework. You didn’t know it then, but it was a set of problems impossible to solve. To be precise, a regular PC would take 240 trillion years over each one.”

“Oh,” said Mikey.

After that they stared at each other for a long time.

“How did you do it, Mikey?” Regev said. “How? Will you tell us?”

“I will have to,” Mikey said quietly. “Otherwise other people will make me tell and they will use it to hurt people.”

“Bravo,” said Regev, smiling broadly. “You are a very mature young man, Mikey Abram. Feel free to roam the corridor – there are plenty of empty offices you can use. Try to figure out what you did to break it. I’ll send someone to check up on you soon.”

And Regev, psychologist and master of pathological deception, strode away, leaving the door to the padded room unlocked.

He strolled to one end of the corridor, locked the door, then went to the other end. Locked it behind him.

Mikey was still trapped. He just didn’t know it yet.

On his way back to the third-floor conference room, he met Emerson.

“Everything alright?” Emerson asked politely.

“Yeah. Left him to crack it again – he probably doesn’t have his old working out…” Regev trailed off.

“You know, you should mention that to Amelie. Can’t afford to have some invaluable papers drifting around a civilian family home, can we? Nobody wants the Abrams to be targeted.”

“I thought of that,” Regev admitted. “But – how do I say this? Your Amelie doesn’t give off the impression of a commander who enjoys hearing suggestions.”

“Give it a try, Regev. You might not represent a FVEY nation, but you’re part of the team. Best act like a team player.”

Regev nodded. They exchanged goodbyes like polite strangers and Emerson hurried off to the locked corridor.

Back in the padded room, Mikey still had not moved. His limbs felt heavy despite the painkiller.

What have I done, he moaned to himself. Two hundred and forty million years’ worth of computing power! What have I done?

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noridori
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noridori wrote a review Review · May 3

hello there! i know it's been a little while since you posted this but i thought i might give my thoughts anyway :3

first of all i have to mention i think this is a really interesting concept. it seems like it's taking a different path than what i originally guessed...

mikey, or yaakov chaim, seems very placid for a person in his situation, almost uninterested. it's probably not how i would react if i were in his shoes, so i'm curious to see more of his character in the future chapters and seeing how you choose to flesh him out. also i think the hint toward the past accident that earned him his nickname was a really fun detail. i'm eager to see if we get any more hints about that in future chapters, or if it will remain a complete mystery.

really the only thing that made me pause while reading was toward the end where there is a shift from mikey in the cell to regev on his way to the conference room. readers in most scenarios tend to assume 'he' or 'his' refers to the closest preceding noun, in fancy terms. when you shift from 'mikey was still trapped. he just didn't know it yet.' and 'on his way back to the third-floor...' i'd consider clarifying that regev is the one on his way back to avoid readers getting confused.

other than that i had a great time reading this. i really like amelie's lines, especially the 'madame-sir' one. she has a very distinct, consistent voice and it made me giggle a few times...

i'll be looking out for more of this in the future, keep up the good work!

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lifeline wrote a review Review · Apr 24

Woahhh I love it! This is going in a rlly interesting direction hehe it might just be me but i was not expecting that; it's so good tho!
"She tapped her foot, clad in $9,740.58 worth of sneaker, impatiently as she waited for her colleagues - underlings, really - to silence." I feel like this could be reworded? Maybe put 'impatiently' before the 'clad in $$$' part. Also perhaps sneaker would be changed to sneakers? Im not completely sure since it's singular 'foot' but sneaker doesnt feel right idk. The little detail about her expensive shoes was really cool though. It felt more realistic/insightful I believe.
I really like the sentence structure and pacing; to me your writing style is so fun to read! And, well... it might just be my uneducated, live-under-a-rock self, but I lowkey don't really know some of the terminology---if it's fictional then it'll probably be explained in due time and you're good, but if it's real life pardon me 'cause I was a bit lost with all the acronyms and such. The fact of Mikey's name change being teased upon was noteworthy as well, and I liked how the chapter was started like that.
"“Wow, did you google that all by yourself? Anyone who thinks it is ethical to let a kid know the secrets of your respective governments can remove themselves from the room immediately.” “I’ll stay put,” said Peters unnecessarily, and stayed put.": Hilarious. I think Google should be capitalized, but literally this section was gold.
I think the fact that Mikey stayed relatively calm and disconnected from his situation is compelling---maybe it's just me, but it reveals a portion of his character and personality. How old is he again? Lol I might have missed that or just forgot but I'm assuming he's a teenager. It's just that adding in a little bit of panic would help with realism and such, even if it's just a small amount. Teenagers often have fluctuating moods, eh?
"...It doesn’t involve transporting any secret information.1 That’s been in use for years.” Typo =P
"“Last-minute briefing.” Amelie put down the bottle. “Now it’s go time. Whenever you’re ready, Regev…” Movement caught Mikey’s eye. The door was opening slowly, unobtrusively."
Since it's a switch in POVs you might wanna add a paragraph in between to help with the transition, otherwise it might feel rather sudden. Other places were fine though I believe; adding an extra paragraph space between the second-to-last paragraph and the paragraph before is optional for formatting but the transition was rlly smooth so it's probably good as is.
The fact that his science camp (unless the name of the science camp is Science Camp, it should be uncapitalized) homework was the unsolvable problem was cool! It reminds me of Spy School 3 a little bit lol, not saying you plagiarized it just gives vibes; I think it was a super fascinating detail!
"Back in the padded room, Mikey still had not moved. His limbs felt heavy despite the painkiller. What have I done, he moaned to himself. Two hundred and forty million years’ worth of computing power! What have I done?" The ending is amazing. Tip for 3rd person is to italicize the thoughts? But like. Wow. 240 million years' worth. That's really insane. I'm so excited to see how this'll progress though; there's a lot of potential!
Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa I'm so sorry I'm late I was really busy the past few days T-T I hope this (sort of?) long review makes up for it!!! Apologies for any grammar mistakes in a review about being nitpicky about grammar mistakes xD
And sorry if any of this comes off as rude or something lol I really do think that it's a great story and will totally be looking forward to notifications about chapter updates in the future! Good luck on writing chapter 2!!!
Edit: oh wow it really was long

creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Apr 23

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the mortifying S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Rachel told her husband and her other son about Mikey being taken away, Mikey is told to open doors by another one of the government people, but still, he is trapped in the facility.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I don’t exactly understand why Mr. Abram said he forgave Rachel for not telling him earlier. Yes, I feel like he has a right to be upset, but I feel like his reaction might have been a little too over the top. That’s just me though.

Chocolate Bar - I like how Mikey is wary about taking the pills that Regev gave him, because why would he trust them after what had happened earlier? I also like how Mikey is being compliant…for now. Because he believes that he will be able to go home soon if he just does what he’s told.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a lovely first chapter! I hope to learn more about this totally not shady government organization and about what will happen to Mikey later on! I have enjoyed reading this and…

I wish you an amazing day/night! ^v^



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