Young Writers Society

Hi...a quick review from.my point of view.

The story centers around two worlds, humans and snakes, fighting for power. Amrita, a strong character, puts her child’s safety first, showing the importance of motherhood. When she is captured by her sister and her husband, she decides to take control of her fate rather than suffer through their torture.

As time passes, her child grows into a beautiful woman and begins to regain her powers. Guided by a higher force through her dreams, she starts to understand her destiny. Although these dreams are meant to be helpful, they also fill her with fear, hinting at the challenges she will face.

Overall, the story has a strong foundation, but the narration could be improved. It sometimes reads more like a review than a flowing narrative. With some adjustments, the storytelling could draw readers in even more and enhance the overall experience.

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!

First Impression

Well this was quite an intriguing start here. For something with so few words we had quite a lot go down an I think it really makes for an intriguing opening part here.

Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;

A woman named Amritha with a newborn baby is trying to enter the human world to protect her child from her sister's husband and his cruel gang. On the way, the child was bitten by a snake and to save her child she used the power of snake pearl and changed the poison into a black mole. She opened the human world and entered into a village called Malana. To save her child she gives the baby to a couple and hides the snake pearl in a Shiva temple. After that, she decided to face the enemies. So she went back to the snake world and started to fight them. They kept asking her where the child and the snake pearl but she kept silent to protect both. To escape from their cruel torture she jumped off the cliff and died. They kept searching for the child and the snake pearl.

Several years later both became mysterious things and they only know that Amrita's daughter has a mole on the right leg's 2nd toe and the mole on the snake-bited area. Amrita's sister's name is Lakshya and her husband's name is Vishwa. Vishwa began to rule Amrita's kingdom and he killed Lakshya for supporting Amrita but Vishwa and Lakshya had a son and after his mother's death, he moved to a forest and began to live there.

There is only one day left before Amrita's daughter Vishaka becomes 21 years and it's a full moon night. She was sleeping in her bed and the skin was glowing golden snake-like. In her sleep, she dreams of a woman who says" Your time has come to realize who you are. You are not an ordinary human. You are my child and you have the power of 100 snakes and you can surely control water" and the scenes of her mother's murder comes into her dreams. She woke from that dream with a fear on her face. At that time she noticed her skin, she was really scared, she took a blanket and filled her entire body in that and went to sleep again. The next day when she woke up looks her entire body but it was all alright. Thought it was a dream and she left it and got ready to go to the office. On the way, she sees an old man. He requested her to stop the car.