Blue Rain

Hi Junebug! Welcome to YWS! I look forward to reviewing the poems you've share with us so far.

I love poems about nature, I admire the complexity and beauty given to us through the world around us, so I find any art focused on poetry to be special and unique in it's own way.

The bolded words at the end of each line create a singular conscious thought, and I love how you do this at the end of the lines instead of the beginning. It ties the last line referring to the storms and dark clouds, which is usually associated with something negative, with something beautiful, which you bring through in your own perspective of the rain.

This poem is filled with powerful imagery, all tied together through the singular motif of nature and beauty. The title, though, is "Sound of Nature" but there seems to only be one line referring to actual sound (line 1). I think you could include multiple words that emphasize the sound of nature, as well as the beauty in imagery. For example, you could write,

People say storms are sad, but I smile at the dark clouds thunder above.

Or, you could change the title to not focus so much on just the sound, that way it doesn't feel like you are misleading the reader.

The line

The little squirrel is incredibly beautiful.

feels a little awkward in this poem, as you go into more detail in the other lines but keep this one so direct. What about the squirrel is beautiful? You can experiment with the language and detail of this line while keeping "beautiful" as the end-word to preserve the bolded statement.

You did very well at the ending-punctuation, and capturing the precious beauty of nature. Great work! Excited to read more :)

Alright, let's get down to business.
I read this and was immediately transported into this place. The sensory details are amazing.

The sound of the creek is a beautiful gift from Nature.

This works as an opener buts it's different from the rest of the lines. It sticks out when you finish reading.

The glistening leaves are a bright shade of green, as everything is.

It almost feels like you tried a little too hard to make a line that ended in Is. But that's probably just me.

The little squirrel is incredibly beautiful.

Aww. The visual this brings to mind is adorable.

I quietly read my book and look up when,
a sudden gust of wind pulls at the trees, flashing a streak of blue.

The comma after when tripped me up a little, but otherwise I have no complaints.

I pause my reading and watch the drops of rain.

The rain has arrived. My first thought was "oh no! The book's gonna get wet!"

A beautiful caterpillar hides under the leaves as the first droplet falls,
colorful wings flutter above the rosy blossoms, sweet nectar to drink from.

Two things here. We've already seen the squirrel labeled as "beautiful". It's a little repetitive to call the caterpillar it again, but I'm trying to find things to critique and being very picky about it.
I had to reread "colorful wings" before I figured out that it was a butterfly. Probably want to lead with what it is.

People say storms are sad, but I smile at the dark clouds above.

The final flourish! This is a great way to end it all. Full circle.

Finally the bolded words. An amazing way to do it. A poem inside of a poem! *Giggles in delight*

Overall I loved this! It's a great idea, especially with the mini poem. My only things are me being picky...
Keep living and writing!
MrytleJinn

Hi, this is a really lovely poem with beautiful imagery that builds up a scene very vividly in my head. I often think these same things when I am reading my book outside or by the river and you've put my own thoughts into words beautifully!

I absolutely LOVE how the bold words create their own poem. It's so clever, and I used to love playing around with poetry like that! It gives it a whole other level. There's lots of sensory details that really ground the poem. Lovely work

I quietly read my book and look up when.
A sudden gust of wind pulls at the trees, flashing a streak of blue.

I know it was me who said about using punctuation in poems, but the thing to remember is it still has to match how you would write a sentence, so you wouldn't need one after when since the next line is a continuation of that same sentence, if that makes sense?