Published February 17, 2006
No where.
When asked where I live this is what I say. Want to know why?
Because I that is where I do live. When giving directions to get to my house most of the things I say consist of either down this track or along this small road that looks like a track or past the big Oak tree on the left standing next to the Ash. Turn right when you get to the tractor in the ditch.
I’m not saying there is anything wrong with wading through flood water and ankle deep mud to get to the bus stop a mile down the road…
Of course there is an easy way of avoiding the mud and water and that is getting a vehicle that either floats or is more that 3 feet off the ground. Many of the locals have taken this into consideration and now use tractors and 4x4s. (You can often tell who these people are; have a look in a car-park when you next go shopping, you see the muddiest car? I would bet money that the person who owns it also owns a cloth cap and a sheep-dog)
The great thing about my area is the weather. It is very predictable. If it is cloudy then it is raining, if it is clear then it will soon be raining and if you’ve ever seen the sun then clearly you are foreign.
OK, so maybe some of the things about where I live aren’t quite as good as other places; but really, how many people can say to their teachers ‘Sorry I’m late - we got stuck behind a tractor’.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...well that is certainly an interesting point to start with. It does seem a little bit on the random side because we have nothing in the form of context to really place this conversation into something, but on its own it is an interesting bit of dialogue of sorts there and it does make for a fun read so I think you're on a good track, let's see where it takes us.
Alright now we're seeing a little bit of grounding happening in terms of this being a description of where this person lives and how the lifestyle there works. It works a bit better as a piece in that fashion because now we have something to base it off of and I think in that sense this is continuing along very well here.
And that's a fun ending. You really leaned into the one sort of selling point of this and took it about as far as you can reasonably expect something like that to be going. So on the whole I think you've done a really solid job of things there and this is actually a pretty neat piece that accomplishes what it sets out to do quite well.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Yeah, Im with TBR, I dont really get the piece.
"Because I that is where I do live." Yeah... a bit... weird... you have two I's in there...
yeah this was a bit weird, short and nice, but... weird... *is confused*
I think it should have a name that represents where she lives.
The third sentence was a little screwy, I agree, but the last line was brillance! Great job!
-Dani
"Because I that is where I do live. "
It was funny too.
I think this sentence is a little screwy.
Otherwise, interesting! A nice little thing about a place where you live (or at least where the narrator lives). I had expected this to be a rather gothic piece, but no! I'm happy.
I love the last line.
I would call it "Mud, Tractors, and Not Much Else."
Then again, I have a strange sense of humor...