Not a single day goes by when I don't think of you
Each day I wish we could be together
It just keeps getting harder and harder
Yet I still hope that text was from no one but you
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Hearing your name made me a little insane
You brightened my path in my darkest times
You were the reason I kept on tryin'
But now I'm scared to fall in love again
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I'm barricading my feelings and emotions
I'm scared cause eventually they'll come right through
I'm not ready to feel the pain and tensions
Feeling very weak I dunno whether i'll make it through
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Who would have ever thought you would mean this much to me?
It took me only a few days to completely fall in love with you
I'm sorry I made things awkward, I'm sorry I'm not impeccable
I'm hoping that you are not mad at me
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Afraid to face my feelings and emotions
Like a herd of bulls, they will all come charging right through
Too afraid to face all the pain and tensions
Feeling very weak I dunno whether i'll make it through
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Just hearing your name made my smiles inevitable
Feels like it was yesterday when I first fell for you
I'm sorry I made things awkward, I'm sorry I'm not impeccable
Cause deep inside, I don't wanna continue without you
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I don't wanna have to face heartbreak again
Please just promise me you won't come back
Cause I don't wanna hurt you the same way you did me back
In the end, I'm too scared to fall in love again
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Not a single day went by when I didn't think of you
Each day I wished we could've been together
It just kept on becoming harder and harder
But deep down, I don't wanna continue without you
~~
So don't you dare come back and stab my heart with that knife
I trusted you with it, now my heart is bleeding for life
I'd never want to hurt you, even though I'm in pain
Because in the end…. I'm too scared to fall in love again
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This was honestly so heartfelt!
I loved every line of it as it really showed your true emotions when you were in a certain state of mine. I hope your alr now! My PM's are open to both you and someone who is just casually looking through the reviews
Stay safe and keep writing,
Love Rubes x
Thank you for the kind feedback:)
Review timeeeeee!!!!!
Uh, the title was interesting, so i clicked it, just like @ForeverYoung299
Noice another poem about love! Never gets old.
On to the review:
Overall-10/10
Remark: Beautiful.
The poem was great! Great descriptive text, great metaphors(herd of bulls), and no errors with spelling or anything else. I loved the way you conveyed the speakers heartbreak and longing, 'i hope that text was from no one but you', and how you did some pretty nice rhymes. Make more poems, I'll be looking forward to it!
Thank you for your review, means a lot to me:)
np!
Hello. Here for a review.
Before reading: The title made me to come here and check it out.
After reading: In one word, this was awesome.
Grows
To be honest, this line doesn't sound good in my ears. Especially the phrase yet still. These are similar words. Maybe you could change the position of still with I. I think in that way, it will sound better.
Although there is nothing severely wrong with it, but could you replace reason with cause and put a ‘that’ after that?
Could you replace cuz with because or as? Those are words used in daily life but tentatively, I think you should not use them in literature.
In many other places too, you have used them.
Just to emphasize the fact, could you put an ‘only’ before a few days?
Glows
Again repeating, this was actually a thought-provoking one. I was heart-broken while reading this.
These were my favourite lines. I loved how you described love as a knife!!
Hope it helps.
Thank you so much for the review, ill be sure to make some edits when I get the time, thank you for the advice:)
No problem
Something went wrong with the editing which explains why there is no space between the stanzas, each stanza is four lines FYI
Ok all fixed, enjoy