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Scared to fall again~

by InJung15


Not a single day goes by when I don't think of you

Each day I wish we could be together

It just keeps getting harder and harder

Yet I still hope that text was from no one but you

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Hearing your name made me a little insane

You brightened my path in my darkest times

You were the reason I kept on tryin'

But now I'm scared to fall in love again

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I'm barricading my feelings and emotions

I'm scared cause eventually they'll come right through

I'm not ready to feel the pain and tensions

Feeling very weak I dunno whether i'll make it through

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Who would have ever thought you would mean this much to me?

It took me only a few days to completely fall in love with you

I'm sorry I made things awkward, I'm sorry I'm not impeccable

I'm hoping that you are not mad at me

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Afraid to face my feelings and emotions

Like a herd of bulls, they will all come charging right through

Too afraid to face all the pain and tensions

Feeling very weak I dunno whether i'll make it through

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Just hearing your name made my smiles inevitable

Feels like it was yesterday when I first fell for you

I'm sorry I made things awkward, I'm sorry I'm not impeccable

Cause deep inside, I don't wanna continue without you

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I don't wanna have to face heartbreak again

Please just promise me you won't come back

Cause I don't wanna hurt you the same way you did me back

In the end, I'm too scared to fall in love again

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Not a single day went by when I didn't think of you

Each day I wished we could've been together

It just kept on becoming harder and harder

But deep down, I don't wanna continue without you

~~

So don't you dare come back and stab my heart with that knife

I trusted you with it, now my heart is bleeding for life

I'd never want to hurt you, even though I'm in pain

Because in the end…. I'm too scared to fall in love again


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Mon Mar 22, 2021 2:11 pm
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Review timeeeeee!!!!!

Uh, the title was interesting, so i clicked it, just like @ForeverYoung299

Noice another poem about love! Never gets old.

On to the review:

Overall-10/10
Remark: Beautiful.

The poem was great! Great descriptive text, great metaphors(herd of bulls), and no errors with spelling or anything else. I loved the way you conveyed the speakers heartbreak and longing, 'i hope that text was from no one but you', and how you did some pretty nice rhymes. Make more poems, I'll be looking forward to it!




InJung15 says...


Thank you for your review, means a lot to me:)



HJYoung says...


np!



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Hello. Here for a review.

Before reading: The title made me to come here and check it out.

After reading: In one word, this was awesome.

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Yet still I hope that text was from no one but you

To be honest, this line doesn't sound good in my ears. Especially the phrase yet still. These are similar words. Maybe you could change the position of still with I. I think in that way, it will sound better.

You were the reason I kept on tryin'

Although there is nothing severely wrong with it, but could you replace reason with cause and put a ‘that’ after that?

I'm scared cuz eventually they'll come right through

Could you replace cuz with because or as? Those are words used in daily life but tentatively, I think you should not use them in literature.
In many other places too, you have used them.
It took me a few days to completely fall in love with you

Just to emphasize the fact, could you put an ‘only’ before a few days?

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Again repeating, this was actually a thought-provoking one. I was heart-broken while reading this.

So don't you dare come back and stab my heart with that knife

I trusted you with it, now my heart is bleeding for life

I'd never want to hurt you, even though I'm in pain

Cuz in the end…. I'm too scared to fall in love again

These were my favourite lines. I loved how you described love as a knife!!

Hope it helps.




InJung15 says...


Thank you so much for the review, ill be sure to make some edits when I get the time, thank you for the advice:)





No problem



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Mon Mar 22, 2021 12:04 pm
InJung15 says...



Something went wrong with the editing which explains why there is no space between the stanzas, each stanza is four lines FYI




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InJung15 says...



Ok all fixed, enjoy





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