Cool Memories I

by Ieatworms
  • November 28, 2005
  • Poetry
  • Narrative
  • Old Poetry
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This was one of your more accessible poems. I liked it.

One point of concern:

"Her taste lingers like languid language leaves the reader speechless."

I think a word or comma is missing here.

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PsyLynx
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PsyLynx commented · Thu Dec 01, 2005 3:38 am

I really like it a lot. Good job.



Edna began to feel like one who awakens gradually out of a dream, a delicious, grotesque, impossible dream, to feel again the realities pressing into her soul.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening