Young Writers Society

It's weird, I have a very mixed opinion on hero's. but I think that they definitely need to show more, as there are different sides to people that are never shown, but are very important. I mean on one hand you can watch something like THE BOYS and see all the horrible things that could live behind a hero, all the skeletons in their closet, or on the other hand in most fiction hero's are perfect and have no flaws. any flaw they might have is like you said a early death over their careless actions to protect, or the fact that they are not keeping enough peace. I like this a lot but hero's are really almost never doing it for the peace, and if they are; they usually are not doing a good enough job. anyone making good progress will end up dead as it is too much of a risk for one person.-as you said. anyway great stuff!

Hey @Thediffident here! Here's a review for your piece:
This was such an interesting read! The concept you put out here was truly amazing and unique. It got me thinking about this a lot. Heroes are known for their achievements, success, optimism and their bright persona. Even in the roughest and hardest of times they always come through, that too with a smile on their faces. Even when they need help, they comfort others. The way you described their positive and selfless attitude here was amazing. Great work!

I tell you a tale,

A beautiful tale.

A sorrowful tale,

A tale of love,

A tale of hate,

A tale of grief,

A tale of hope,

A tale of life,

But mainly a tale of purpose.

A hero…

Why must they think to die for people who do not realise why

Hi HeVan! Welcome to YWS, I hope you're enjoying the site so far.

I have mixed feelings about prologues to stories as for a while they seemed like they were a kind of hygiene factor of the fantasy/adventure genre, that is that all books had them because they were sort of expected by the reader but weren't necessarily adding anything to the book.

I think the actual content of this piece is good, and it does cue an 'epic tale' but I wonder whether it's actually needed. For me, I need to be drawn into the story from the start - either by being thrown into action or at least through meeting some characters. I worry that because this prologue is quite vague it won't grip the reader in the way an adventure story needs to. Once you've written your chapter one (and perhaps once you have a general outline of the novel) you can go back and revisit this and ask yourself if you need it, or if you can go straight into chapter one.

Why must they think to die for people who do not realize why

Why must heroes die young?

Why must heroes always suffer?

Why, in the end, do they always win?

This is a start to an epic story.