Hello there! I’m popping in to give a quick review on this unique work of yours.
There’s not too much to really critique on this, but I would like to go over the apparently eerie tone in this memo. This reminds me a little of the Five Nights at Freddy’s games with how specific some of these instructions are and how a few seem rather odd. I’m assuming this could be a portion of a later project, something of a novel in the making, and if so, I think there is a very interesting vibe within these words.
One suggestion I would give is to maybe show little pieces of previous revisions, along with the newly made list itself, such as having strikethroughs or even italics and bolded words to have certain stuff truly stand out. Other than that, I’m always interested in the storyline behind things, so having even a peak at what this memo really is meant to show would be really neat.
Of all of them, the conversation line gives a rather weird taste, going over how long each customer should be given. I wonder what has happened when the limit has gone over. The electronics line was also a really interesting one since it seems like a normal job may allow access to technology and things like that.
This was quite unique! It certainly belongs in its own category. Nicely done.
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