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by GiggleGremlin

Published April 24, 2011

In Poetry

I'm not sure why I wrote this :) But I had sudden inspiration. I really relate to it. I know it's not that great but I hope you enjoy it! Any comments are appreciated :P

In a sea of people,
Am I the only one who’s lost?
There’s so much to take in,
Too many things at once,

How do you pay attention?
When there are so many things to see,
A billion tiny voices,
And a million thoughts to feel.

Is there a secret that I haven’t heard?
Something that I should know?
How do you live this thing called life?
I think I’ll learn it as I go.

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snickerdooly
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snickerdooly wrote a review Review · May 16, 2011

Hi! I definitly liked this poem, it brought up a lot of good questions and emotions that made the poem interesting and engaging. The only thing that I think you could fix is the length of the poem, I felt that the story it was trying to tell was not yet finished. This is just my suggestion so do whatever you wish. :) Great job on this though I really did like it.
Peace,
Snickerdooly

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laylaflame
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laylaflame wrote a review Review · May 2, 2011

MWHAHA! I FINALY CHECKED IT!
Is this the one you ment? Anyway it is now:)
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I like it. I sometimes feel the same way, actually when i was younger i used to think everyone else knows some big secret except me or that theres a big answer to everything everyone knows but me... i was a odd kid:) I think someone else said this too but it really does have a very innocent, happy vibe to it and its nice to read. Its like a possitive way at looking at the unknown/life:)
welldone miss andypandy!

-Layla Flame:D

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alwaysjustme
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alwaysjustme commented Comment · Apr 25, 2011

I like it. It has a ice flow and I loved the last line. I can relate to the poem. Lol my only critique is that I think its a bit short.

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mellophone7
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mellophone7 commented Comment · Apr 25, 2011

I love this! I can totally relate to how you have to learn life as you go. Simple, yet well written poem. Great job!!! :)

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StoryWeaver13
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StoryWeaver13 wrote a review Review · Apr 24, 2011

This was cute, if nothing else. It just felt...happy? It was just sort of confused but curious, and that was interesting to me. The only thing's that I think it was still missing something - that deeply secret "X" factor that makes it unique. It was nice to read, but it could always be better. But it was fine, whether you tweak it or not is your choice, and it's nice as-is.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

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halogirl4197
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halogirl4197 commented Comment · Apr 24, 2011

I like it :) all of the words are true!

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NLPrincess13
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NLPrincess13 commented Comment · Apr 24, 2011

very good, i guess "I'm not sure why I wrote this" is exactly why you write it! :D
good job, Keep up update us with more pieces

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ahmedBurooj
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ahmedBurooj commented Comment · Apr 24, 2011

i really liked the end.
"i'll learn it as i go" . i can totally relate. :)



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