I have been working on this for ages and I've been so wanting to post this 
I really hope you like it and understand it and please comment anything!!
Somewhere on an endless plane,
You reached for me to dance,
And a thousand lifeless, envious eyes,
Watched as I took your hand.
Come dance with me your echo,
Of a brilliant nearby sun,
My swirling heart of ocean,
Pulled by subtle moonlit charm.
Guide my seasons of hesitation,
Waltz’s of winter and fall.
Under your hand night flowers bloom,
And life springs from the soil.
My life is in the dances we dance,
Your love in the mirrored sunshine,
So let the stars whisper
And the planets talk,
Because we’ll orbit
Till the end of time.
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Hi there,
. I liked the general flow in this piece of poetry and I found it all very relevant. The theme of this poem is also new, creative and inventive. Don't even consider changing anything in this poem (it's absolutely awesome! 
) Nothing bad in this at all, keep up the great writing!!!
I really liked the emotion portrayed in this poem and I found it great from the beginning to the end. I particularly enjoyed reading the third stanza because of the amazing words and adjective's you used. Great language in this
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Thankyou everyone for the comments =D
I love this!! I'm getting a total feel of prince/princess, medieval, true love, etc. It's awesome! Don't change it!
I like it alot. Its a little hard to understand but I think alot of great poetry can be hard to understand lol. I like the deep meaning and its just a really nice poem. check out my poetry? pleaseee
Thanks Laylie
And thanks everyone for the reviews ^_^
DONT CHANGE IT! i love it, who cares if the stupid people out there dont get it:P
i think you have an awesome idea here and i like the way you find out little hints about what its about throughout the peom. Seriously tho i thinks it great. i hate you-_-
-Layla Flamemememe!!
Yeah so I really like it..
I think it has beautiful language and great metaphors. One thing is I can see why some might not get what it's about. Maybe you could use a few more extra verses to describe what you're talking about?
Love it though <3
It's pretty, but I'm sorry, I don't get it...Is it supposed to be like the earth and sky in harmony or something?
This is a very beautiful poem. I really didn't find anything wrong with it but yeah, I understand what you mean. Good job!
Good job!