Hello there girl how are you?
I wish I was with you too
You shouldve stayed here for a while
So I could have the chance to make you smile
/
All those things that they all said
You cried away alone in your bed
No words were spoken
/
What about me?
You stupid girl
Get up be free, out of this world
/
You were told to be yourself
No one supported you oh well
Every day went by so slow
You were called names you didnt know
So loneliness crept in, loneliness crept in
/
What about me?
You stupid girl
Get up be free, out of this world
/
Shame on me
Shame on you
/
Live your life under a razor blade,
hurts so bad youre used to pain
Lie there helplessly you lay
You think about it every day and day
The thoughts still haunt you, still haunt you
/
You took your life, stupid girl!
Now here am I, in another world!
What about me? Stupid girl
/
Shame on me
Shame on you
Shame on me
Shame on you
Stupid girl
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Hi,
OMG!!! I loved it, it was so good and heartfelt and the emotion was perfect. The way it makes you think the way it makes me think is like wow. Its amazing I loved it continue writing for sure .
Hi,
OMG!!! I loved it, it was so good and heartfelt and the emotion was perfect. The way it makes you think the way it makes me think is like wow. Its amazing I loved it continue writing for sure .
Hello,
Your work, by the way, is awesome. It is meant to be pretty much sad, but it also makes you reflect about things. You did a great job on wording, and I would like you to keep it up. Is fantastic. A few people wont get the whole idea, but you did well on it. I understand the tone and it impact me. I wasn't expecting it to be about this, but it makes sense from beginning to end. I would like to hear someone sing it and play it. Keep it up.
You are doing a great job.
Nice work!
Hello, FrameOfMind. I took a look at your other song but didn't quite like it as much as the lyrics in this one. I can't say much about the words and such though because since it is a song it's hard to tell unless it's played but I liked it. The end was a bit repetitive but again I'd have to hear it played. I hope you continue to write music and share it with the world. Keep writing and never get discouraged!
~Keepwriting