After You

Whoa. Awesome lyrics. This one has to be my fave lyrics you've written so far. I love you lyrical style. Very raw and in-your-face with the emotions, you know? Again, I wish you lots of success. You have great talent here my friend.

Hello!

First of all before I review I am super exited to read this.

I loved the way this was written. It tells a very clear story to me. I would love to hear this if

someone were to sing it. The only thing that kinda bothered me was how short it was but that's

just me. My favorite lyric was when you said "I blew out my candles to hear your voice again"

Overall this was amazing i hope you keep writing beautiful stuff like this.

Bye, Have a nice day!

Hey! Its Ever here!

I love this song. It flowed extremely well, and the lyrics made sense. If you ever record it, be sure to put it on YouTube so I can listen.

There was a bit of confusion trying to figure out what part of a song the lyrics were. So maybe you could label them Verse, Pre-Chorus, Chorus, Bridge, and such.

I think you should repeat the Chorus after the Bridge, just because that's really standard song format. I mean, you don't have to but it would make me feel better.

Also, I felt like this read a lot like Adele's songs "Hello" and "Someone Like You". If you don't want people thinking about that while they read, then either come up with a catchy melody, or revise a few words

This was a pleasure to read, and I hope you have a good day.

Ever

This is absolutely beautiful. Filled with wonder and confusion. I can sense it is about a relationship, although its a little hard to put the lyrics into music. But you probably have something that you could put it to. This is a very depressing relation if it is about one. Maybe some background or more about this story would really help. But it is amazing. Keep on writing you have a real talent.

nice work this is great and I wish I could think of something this good. I love how you have a good theme that is easy to understand and to follow. its a little hard to put into music but I sure you had something that you could put it to. I must mention how depressing this feels to me and how much I was wondering the full story. Frame you can not stop make more you are very talented and will be able to improve to a master at writing lyrics id give you more if I could a round of applause, a hug (though that might be weird), or if I was some kind of recording studio a contract because your awesome. please shoot for the stars and if you do good luck.