The love you feel, when you're in his arms
You wish, you wish, you wish, again
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The pain you feel, when he's not around
You wish, you wish, again
/
Make amends with your past and you'll feel like
You're on-top of the world, once again
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Tell me!
Am I too slow?
Tell me!
Tell me!
Am I slow?
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Who am I to tell you how to love someone?
Who am I to tell you how to love someone you know you love?
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The pain you feel, when you're in his arms
You wish, you wish?
Again, again
/
Tell me!
Am I too slow?
Tell me!
Tell me!
Am I slow?
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I do not see this as one voice trying to sing these long and then these shorter parts!
The same line repeated several times is something I had seen and which is common and suitable for some songs.
It sounds well in your song but still it is better if a second voice could sing this parts?
Well,maybe.This is what I think.
It has potential! Go on!
Ahaaan !
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Hey dear ! I totally agree with Tammi . It could be sung better as a duet. Nice words , nice lyrics I mean.wish I could soon hear it and sing along. May this would turn out to be the great. The repeatition is so cute.
"Tell me Tell me."
Wish to have A guitar and singing this song. How cool
Keep it up dear. Stay happy and blessed.
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WOW!
hey there!
I actually started singing this song and it is so good!
Hope you write this good forever. Though i have a suggestion for you that whenever you sing this song try to do it as a duet. I think it would sound great then rather than a solo performance. It seems to go good with guitar too!
AWESOME!
loves..
Hi FrameofMind!
Very nice to meet you. I don't know what kind of sound this song has or would have but I really enjoyed it. Especially the 'you wish, you wish, again, again' parts. Very catchy. Well done my friend! I wish you all the world's success with your music!