Wassup wassup wassup, this is Ossum for a review ^-^
So I liked the imagery of this piece. That is my favorite part because, well, I'm a sucker for being able to see things. Now I will say one thing t critique it on, is the fact that you put this under lyrical. Not that is necessarily the problem as it may, but when a reader thinks lyrics, they think songs and choruses, and certain flow patterns.
This piece has the flow of a poem, a great poem at that though.
I also want to say that you have a knack for addressing the issue on suicide after a break up. Needless to say the focus of a gun to turning away from it is powerful. And you should be proud to have come up with such a viewpoint. Keep it up ^-^
Points: 419
Reviews: 34
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