Hey! Welcome to YWS!
I'm here to bring this out of the green room for you!
I really like the ideas you're talking about here. You're completely right, everything is recycled and there really are no original ideas anymore. I like your use of language to convey your ideas about the topic. You did a nice job of getting your point across, while being concise and not saying the say thing over and over, while also having enough style to not make your ideas seem dry.
My only note is that it feels somewhat unfinished. When I got to the end of the paragraph, I felt like there should be several more paragraphs to discuss the topic and delve a little deeper into your ideas. I'm not sure if you were planning on turning this into a longer essay of sorts or if this was just a thought you had and you wanted to get it down. If it's the later, I don't want you to waste your precious points! If you're not looking for feedback on the writing itself and it's just an idea you want to put out there, that's a good thing to post on your wall or in one of the forums so people can discuss and you don't have to use any of your points.
Hope you stick around and enjoy the site! Let me know if you have any questions
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