Such a simple, short, but powerful poem. I especially love the ending, it ties it together very nicely. The imagery this poem provides is amazing, lovely job in that department. However this line "Tired after walk," is awkward spoken outloud, and doesn't quite flow with the rest of the poem, trying changing it slightly, but not a lot. I do love this poem, excellent in the word choice and meaning. Keep writing.
Points: 326
Reviews: 19
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