Heya, Eros, Casanova here to do another review for you. Anyway, onward.

The first thing I noticed was that this chapter sorta went by too quickly, and that it wasn't in any sense long enough.

I think you should go into more detail about their friendship, how close they're getting, how they become close, and how they react. Go into details about this so the reader knows the relationship that they're dealing with. Is part of her anger directed at herself for liking him? Is it just a friendship? Is it something more? Do they think it can be something more? I mean, it would be nice to have a little bit more insight as to what is going on, but that's completely up to you.

Another thing I would like an insight to would be of Michikos life. At least, giving us a reason of why she's angry all the time, why she's letting accidents and stuff get to her when before she would let people get in her face, scream and curse, and throw stuff at her without doing anything about it. To me that seems like a major personality change that should be explained throughout the story, and not leave everything in the shadows, if that makes any sense.

But primarily I'm focusing on Tamao, and his character change, which seems to be sparked by Michiko. But this is just me and I could be completely wrong. Anyway, I think that's all I have, and I hope this helped.

Keep on doing what you're doing.

Sincerely, Casanova

This is Weirdo, here for a review. Please know that nothing in this review is meant to offend you or your story. This is just my opinion, you and other readers and reviewers could disagree. That being said, let us get into this review.

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Friendship of Tamao and Michiko increased day by day. Michiko started to feel free with Tamao especially from the day she started to share the desk with him.

But Michiko was already in a bad mood since morning that day and morever being a clean freak, she couldn't bear her notebook getting messed up.

Tamao tried to solve the matter amongst themselves and he was successful in ceasing the matter there itselfz without the news being reached upto the teachers and consequently to the principal.

"Michiko, I need to talk to you." Tamao looked at her, with grave seriousness.

"Tell me what is going on." Tamao said, in a demanding voice.

"Yes. Tell me." Tamao looked straight in her eyes.

"Umm... Not a bad idea. My parents? Yeah they'll of course allow me."

The matter was trivial. Ichiro, a black chubby little, rude girl dropped a fruit juice on Michiko's home assignment notebook accidentally.

I'm back again~

Overall I like how this story is developing still. You're taking us through the beginning steps of a friendship, showing us the way that they interact in their own timid way, and you're building up Michiko as an emotional wreck. That development is also at a really good pace. You're on Chapter Three and already into your rising action of Michiko's problem, which is really good.

Here's what I found that I think needs some help.

"It was ok till the fight was just verbal."

So this sentence confused me in context. You said earlier that the fight was just verb, and now you're saying that it was okay until it was just verbal, that doesn't make sense because the fight was okay when it was verbal, but you're saying it wasn't okay when it was verbal. You're contradicting yourself. Instead, I think you mean "wasn't" just verbal or "it was okay until the fight became physical" which would get rid of the double negative problem.

Overall, I have noticed that your novel from chapter 1 through 3 includes some details that you don't really need, and I'm not talking about awkward prepositional phrases this time, I'm talking about Tamao's supposedly being perfect, and the red eyes from Chapter 1. As I don't see any more of this, and I've gotten a bit into the story, I'll just talk about it now.

If you intend to use his eyes changing color as a part of the story, it should be included in more chapters in minor ways to develop the idea that this kid is supernatural and can change his eye color at will with his emotions. If that's not the intent of that line, then change it from 'brick red' eyes to something more traditional. I mean, kids don't usually have red eyes. They have brown, and black, and blue, and so on and so forth, but red? Unless the person is an albino, that's not really going to happen. Now, if he IS an albino, more power to you, and leave it as is.

Next, you mention in the first chapter how Tamao is so perfect he's in sports, and great at everything. I really don't think that needs to be there. Tamao doesn't need to be in football, the top of his class, or the best at every instrument in order to have respect and fear from the school bullies. From personal experience with bullies, all you have to do to be ignored by them later, is put them in their place. If he did that when he was younger, like in pre-school, that could be how he's not touched by bullies. He might also just be a big guy. If he's a big guy, they're unlikely to touch him or talk to him regardless of what he can and cannot do, or how he is. Kids are intimidated by body size, so if he's a 5 ft 6th grader, and a 6"11 freshman, he's a big guy and that can protect him alone without any confrontation.

Storytelling tells us to remove anything we're not going to use in the story and so far, Tamao hasn't used the relationships he would get from being good at music or good at football and on the team. If he was chumming around with the other footballers due to their comradery from playing the sport, and he used that to stop some of them from picking on Michiko, then I would understand including it, but you isolated him from the footballers immediately by saying everyone sees him as competition, which is rarely true on a football team form my understanding. Anyone on a team tends to pack up because they spend so much time together during practice, on the bus to away games, and so forth. They look out for each other and rely on one another on and off the field.

So, if you never use these things again, I'd suggest you make Tamao more normal in order to encourage people to identify with him. Right now, I'm sort of lost about who Tamao is because he's this guy who does x, y, and z, but he doesn't Show that with how he's acting, we've just been told that.

I hope this gives you some new help~