Etiquette

That is indeed short but I will agree that it is powerful.I like your use of words, and the good thing about it is that when someone reads it gets immediately thirsty for more.It is a bit of a let down to end it so abruptly, so maybe add a few verses and make it whole?hust an idea...

Hullooo Holly! Found this while searching for things to review~

hmmm... I don't know how I feel about this. You can feel the turbulent emotions in it, and I love the shortness of it. I love how it stops you in your tracks and then let's you go again so quickly. However, a couple of things jumped out at me. For instance, the first line is odd. "Is it proper?" seems like it's not correct grammar, even though it technically is. Think about it, would you ever say "Is it proper" in this kind of context? I wouldn't. I would say okay, right, wrong, disappointing, surprising... A word that would give the reader more of a feel for what emotion I'm trying to portray in this poem. For instance; "Is it surprising, that I use sharp, metal words" etc etc. It makes it a little more personal. Gives it a little more oomph. (Also, little convention error, there should be a comma between sharp and metal.)

Continuing on~
I feel like this is a little run of the mill as language goes. You use common phrasing, like sharp, metal, blood. You could put a lot more imagery in there just by changing these words into phrases describing the actual things. "iron" instead of metal, for example. It puts me in mind of a dark, secret kind of metal, rather than a kitchen knife. Much more sinister.

However, I love this poem, whether you choose to change or leave it. <333 Great job, lovely!
-PeytonCakes

This is a good poem, Epic. I don't have time for a full-blown review right now, so just a quick comment:

The imagery you've created in this really comes through, as well as the raw emotion. The short, concise lines of the poem really concentrate the emotion. Anything more in the poem then it'd just be a frilly, dressed-up mess and you'd lose the original intentions behind it.

One thing that really stands out is the use of whitespace by putting "drops?" in a new stanza. It makes the reader almost hold their breath, waiting for the blood to drop.

Definitely well written for something that's all raw emotion. And frankly, sometimes raw emotion gives you a shiny gem with no need for refinement.

As always, keep writing.
- noninjaspresent

Hello! Kameron here, and I will start and be happy to give it the first review!
To start off, there is definitely not a whole lot to work with, but I do like the potential spawning in the words. The only thing that has to do with the title really, 'Etiquette' is the 'Is it proper' in the first line. I think you could lengthen the poem, maybe even make a whole story out of such an idea but for now I'll focus on the poem.

It is a tad confusing, but it could be the fact I haven't eaten much today and my brain is moving at a kind of slow rate. I understand the defiance against the harsh words, a cutting habit to release agony of the words and maybe even the fact the victim has to be polite as it is happening? I enjoy the poem really, and the possibilities it carries in the words but also the countless other dead-end explanations it could lead too. Let it flourish, show other things like maybe examples of the people. Their flawed perfection as their tear her down with razored words. Explain the grinning agony of the release of pain with pain. It would make everything so much better as this may be raw, but it could touched up and increased in beauty.

Also, it is a poem, yes, but it seems a little choppy. 'As the knife against my wrist, and instrument of defiance, while grinning as the blood drops?'. I do not think that flows so well, so easily as maybe..
'Exposing my wrist with my blade,
my instrument of defiance.
How the agony courses down my muscle
the grin gracing my lips sees the blood drops
Watch the crimson tear shatter on the floor..'
Mine is also set on the spot, so I believe it is also not as flowing as possible but something along the lines of detail. Show the the words, the peoples faces as they cut her down. the exposed muscles as she channels the words into a blade made to slice her skin.

Other then that, I see no grammatical errors really, and I would not hesitate to read more work Post or PM with questions.