No Destination (Chapter 7: Watch the Watch)

by EnderFlash

Published April 3, 2017

In No Destination (LMS)

“Hey, we’ve got to go,” Abel called, finishing up his inspection of the pipes snaking up the walls. “They said to get back by 2:00.” When the pilot didn’t respond, Abel clicked his tongue and made his way across the interior of the ship, leather soles soundless against the floor. He stopped behind Cain. Then, he twisted around and yanked the door open. The loud rattle made the other boy visibly jump in his seat.

“Mother’s blessings!” Twisting one of his earflaps, Cain shot Abel a squinty glare. “Can you not? At least make a sound when you’re walking.”

“What happened to your ears being better than mine?” Abel snapped back, one hand still wrapped around the door handle. “I said, come on.”

Cain waved him off. His eyes returned to the buttons and levers. “We’ve got time,” he drawled, “but you can go. “

Frowning, Abel peered to the south. It was a clear day, so the looming Clocktower was easily readable. A hot-air balloon drifted dangerously close to the bottom of the clock, but Abel was sure that the rider wouldn’t dare get in the way of the city’s main time source. Less out of the goodness of their soul, of course, and more because of the hefty fine. “What do you mean?”

There was a groan and a shuffle of fabric. “It’s 1:45,” Cain grumbled, staring down at something.

“Wait, how can you see?” An answer popped into Abel’s mind. Hurrying over to the pilot, his eyes widened when he saw the gadget on the pilot’s wrist. Cain pulled his sleeve back down, but it was too late. “You have a watch?”

Cain pushed his cap down over his eyes, releasing an even louder groan. “Yeah.” Then, he readjusted his headpiece and a smirked, lolling his head back to face the navigator. “Newest model,” he said, displaying the machinery once more. Its novelty was prominent in the sleek design, hardly thicker than an inch, and was one of the fancy ones with a glass covering and wooden hands.

Abel kept his face level, knowing that the pilot was digging for a pathetic display of envy. He had to say something. The first thing to come to mind was a jab involving its pricing and Cain being here on a scholarship, but that would be like pouring gasoline onto their wrecked relationship. So, he voiced the next thought. “Where is that from? I don’t recognize the brand.”

“It doesn’t have one, genius. A friend made it for me.”

“That’s a load of fodder.” No artisan of that level would put that much precious time into a free gift.

“It’s the truth. I have good friends.” Raising his eyebrows in a taunting manner, Cain turned away.

Then, Abel realized something. “Hold up. You’re not allowed to wear accessories during school hours.”

“Of course you’re a stick in the mud, too.” Cain rolled his eyes. “We’ve graduated already. They’re not going to keep on dictating our dress when we’re flying through the air, alone, for ninety-percent of the time.”

“Yes, but we haven’t started flying yet. Those rules are for all students on school grounds, and even if we’re not in university anymore, we’re still considered students for these next two years. On our licenses. And since the school’s renting this takeoff area, it’s school grounds.” It was true that Abel was a stickler for the rules, but this time, his insistence stemmed more from a desire to annoy the other boy.

It was succeeding. “Mother bless me, this is ridiculous. If you report it, you’re just wasting their time. Nobody cares.” With that, Cain slouched back against his seat. He raised his wrist and eyed the watch for longer than probably necessary, then stood up. “Thanks for wasting my time. Now we actually have to go.” He didn’t stop when he reached the exit that Abel was standing in. Instead, he all but pushed the navigator out. The drop to the ground left Abel stumbling.

Heart racing from the near-fall, the navigator whirled around to lash at Cain. The Xingese boy had broken into a run, and was already a decent distance. Abel opened his mouth to yell an uncharacteristic profanity, but the sight of a girl leaving the ship next to theirs had him swallowing those words. Jolyne, if he remembered correctly. If he knew her name, she definitely knew his.

She noticed his stare, and he quickly averted his gaze. Lowering his head, he ran past her in fear that she took his look as an invitation for conversation. Once he was well past her, he slowed into a brisk walk. There were other people, so Abel kept his eyes on the dirt. Every time he spotted partners chatting it up, a bitterness would well up. Unfortunately, there were a lot of students choosing this time to head back to the podium.

“This is why I wanted to go earlier,” he hissed through his teeth. He tried not to think about the fact that he was the only person around walking alone. It helped to remember that Cain was in the same situation.

Finally, he reached the stage for the third time that day. Hopefully it would be the last, and this was to let them go home. Judging from the people lining up at the gates, he was right.

Abel took his place at the end of line, relief lightening his mind. They had only been here for a couple hours, and a good portion of those hours was free time, but it felt like such a long day. He couldn’t wait to get home. Even the prospect of making dinner later that day didn’t change that feeling.

A familiar beige hat was visible above the crowd. Cocking his head, Abel took a step to look further up the line.

It was Cain, all right. The Xingese had his arms slung over the shoulders of two other boys, and their laughter could be heard from where Abel was.

Running his hands through his hair, the navigator sighed. A long day, indeed. 

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rosette
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rosette wrote a review Review · Apr 19, 2017

Hey, hey, I'm back.
What - did you think you could get rid of me? Not with this girl.
Ahem. Excuse me.

So, this will be a short review because I honestly don't have much to say. (Why are you so good at this?) I only had a few problems with a few things in here.

In the beginning, Abel and Cain are chatting about how they need to get moving, and Cain says something along the lines of we've got time. Abel then glances at the clock which was easily readable and asks what he means. Cain tells him the time and Abel is suddenly freaked out how in the world he knew it was 1:45. Why, when the clock was right before them? You did mention a hot air balloon was drifting close to the bottom of the clock, but 1:45 isn't directly at the bottom of a clock. Unless you stated exactly what the balloon was obstructing from view, I don't see why Abel is so concerned.

The first thing to come to mind was a jab involving its pricing and Cain being here on a scholarship, but that would be like pouring gasoline onto their wrecked relationship. First off, I don't know what the "its" in "its pricing" is referring to. I can make a guess, but that's part of the problem here. I shouldn't have to guess, I should just simply know. My second issue here is your comparison at the end. It doesn't make sense to me. How does pouring gasoline onto a wrecked relationship make it any worse? Are you trying to say their relationship was this simmering, angry thing? Because when I think of wrecked relationships, I do not think of that. I think of well, a wreck. Nothing but a huge mess. Anyway, I said that all to say I'd like some clarification there, please.

And those are my thoughts for you to see, Ender. I hope you found 'em helpful, or something like that. If I got some things wrong, or you got some questions, just go ahead and ask. I'll probably get back to you. XD Keep up the great work!
Until next time,
-TheKid

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BluesClues wrote a review Review · Apr 19, 2017

Just curious, and I'm sure I'd know if I'd read since the beginning: Are Cain and Abel actually brothers, or is it only because of their names that I even think that? Considering Abel referring to Cain as "the Xingese boy" makes it sound like no, they're not. In which case, cool! Because generally if these names are used, they absolutely definitely are brothers. I'm also curious to see if you make their non-brother relationship still go the same way as the tale of the Biblical brothers. They're obviously on rocky ground with each other, but if Cain doesn't kill able, that would subvert our expectations.

On that note, I like that Cain is a pilot. Biblical Cain was punished with a life of wandering, and pilots are basically like the ultimate in wandering - they can literally go anywhere. So I don't know if you did that on purpose or not, but it's neat and kind of clever.

In other news, I thought your characterization was really good, particularly the contrast between Cain and Abel. I also think their personalities match their respective roles in a nice way - the pilot, Cain, is more devil-may-care, whereas the navigator, Abel, is more cautious and attuned to rules. The world-building was also great, nice and subtle, without a lot of description to slow things down but with enough to give us a good sense of the world.

I think the only thing that was a little strange to me was referring to Cain as "the Xingese." Put it this way: if he was referred to this sort of way in the real world, it would be kind of awkward and weird to use his ethnicity/country of origin as his defining characteristic. I mean, I guess you could do it, but it's a lot nicer to say "the pilot," "the other boy," "his co-flyer" (or whatever, I'm kind of pulling these out of my butt).



It's like everyone tells a story about themselves inside their own head. Always. All the time. That story makes you what you are. We build ourselves out of that story.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind