I believe I experience the invisible
The unnoticeable and inconceivable
Which are miscellaneous in all things
I feel the locked doors
That I haven’t tried to open
Because I’ve seen others try and fail
I hear every drop of silence
While others hear talking
My lips are sealed shut in secrecy
I see the tragic endings
Of things that have not started
Shaking with fear I change direction
I taste no less than the extraordinary
Filled with hopeless fuel
My tongue is unstoppable
I smell every scent crafted
On maximum volume driving down the freeway
Away from the horrors of reality
And finally, I am invisible
Because I am a ghost that is unseen
By the senses of all life
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What a lovely poem.It expresses the loneliness of not being noticed,yet,not knowing how to break it,because it’s so easy to live by routine.My favorite parts were these lines:”Because I am a ghost that is unseen.By the senses of all life.” This tells us that some people get unnoticed and this person is one of them.Great poem,I enjoyed it.I hope you have a good day.
What a lovely poem.It expresses the loneliness of not being noticed,yet,not knowing how to break it,because it’s so easy to live by routine.My favorite parts were these lines:”Because I am a ghost that is unseen.By the senses of all life.” This tells us that some people get unnoticed and this person is one of them.Great poem,I enjoyed it.I hope you have a good day.
Hello, Hikari here with a review let's get started shall we?
I love the emotion behind your work, I also like your title it fits well with your story.
{I feel the locked doors
That I haven’t tried to open
Because I’ve seen others try and fail}
Thats a very raw line filled with regret at things that could have been.
{I hear every drop of silence
While others hear talking
My lips are sealed shut in secrecy}
Hmm I feel this kind would flow better if it went { in secrecy my lips are Shut} but that's just my opinion
Anyways I enjoyed your poem, kudos! ❤