Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
I feel ashamed. I only realized in this chapter that this was set in 2150 A.D. and that you actually have that mentioned in the title. For someone who looks at detailed theories in stories I pay zero attention to the titles.
First Impression: Looks like the computer's role model is HAL-9000. Anyway pretty interesting system you have there. This story sounds really interesting so far.
Anyway let us begin nitpicking,
As the ship gave its biggest lurch yet, accompanied by the roar of splashing water, Daniel was relieved to see that the engineers had, indeed, done their job quite well. The hull was intact, and, though he still felt the impact to the bone, his restraints held him dutifully in place.
So they have no control whatsoever over this ship?
"You didn't have to speak that command," Joshua pointed out, "And you didn't have to say 'please,' either. N.E.R.O. is a computer; He couldn't care less about pleasantries. In fact, N.E.R.O. couldn't care at all."
Well that's a big question these days actually.
Joshua glanced over at Daniel, away from the viewport. "That's part of what worries me about him. He's too human. And what's more, he can have a body. Didn't you read the waiver you signed for the mission?"
Very irresponsible of him not to real the waiver with legal counsel and no what sort of thing he's getting into.
"Well, one of the stipulations was the installation of some new 'safety' software to your N.E.R.O. chip. That includes a feature that lets N.E.R.O. take control of your body if you fall unconscious in a dangerous situation."
So is this N.E.R.O in each of their heads and the ship itself? Or is just their heads? If it's only the heads why did Daniel randomly talk out loud when he himself said that he was used to talking to it inside his head.
A holographic globe appeared in the center of the capsule. A bright red dot marked their location in one of the inland seas. Daniel furrowed his brow, now more concerned with the map than with N.E.R.O.'s humanity.
So they had no way of knowing where they were landing? Seems like a very bad system there.
"Several things, Joshua. For one, safety. The waters of Genesis are far shallower than those of Earth because the poles remain unfrozen. Due to this, the probability of hitting an uncharted reef was quite uncertain.
And this whole possibility was never considered earlier when they made the decision to land in the ocean?
"Why, General Verias did, friend Joshua. When he made me the mission leader."
I guess all the science fiction books got burned or something or General Verias would know that this was an extremely bad idea.
And that's it.
Overall: This is sounding like a really good story. The personalities are still only barely established but there are signs of development which is good. The plot is well...uhh...still in its infancy so no comments on that yet. The idea is great though.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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