Fly Bird...... GO and fly up in the sky,
Never look back, no matter what you have left
down there.
Just FLY.... Don't waste time,
on sitting
here or there.
You are meant to FLY,
You have got to FLY,
So, FLY!
Down there, perhaps, there's love; there's family
you know.
But don't worry, they'll be fine,
You aren't meant to look back
Or repent.
You are meant to FLY.
So, Bird, Fly! High up in the sky!
Note from AnaMin: For the unnecessary capitalization of some words which were done intentionally, I'm sorry.
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Hahaha! This poem's aggressive and forceful nature made me laugh! It's like you're FORCING the poor bloke to keep flying! HAHAHAHA! I like it!
This poem is........unusual. And that's why I like it. I mean, like I said before, it's got a humourous, forceful nature (or at least it seems that way to me) and that makes it funny, good one!
Keep it up!
Mist
Hello, happy review day!
I love this poem, I find that there are many meanings to it, so I'll go through a couple.
Inspiration
This poem has a very inspirational meaning to it. The repetition of FLY grabs the reader and explains to them that the can excel if they try. By using imagery of a birds first flight, you show us that there is a first time for everything and it just makes it even more meaningful to the reader. By using lots of capitalisation in many different places and free verse, you tell us to break the barriers that surround us and restrict us, to explore other ways to succeed. The whole beauty of this message really makes the poem amazing
Leaving the nest
Going back to the idea of a birds first flight we think of what happens once the bird succeeds. Once they learn to fly(Or we learn how to grow up) a bird leaves to find somewhere new. This, the reader can relate to as all must leave the nest(house) one day to find another one. By using supportive vocabulary within the poem, the reader can relate to the idea of being supported to grow up and do something amazing. Capitals suggest that this bird, however, is very nervous and probably does not want to leave. This is a way of representing the governments push for all to get on the property ladder and to start working. Perhaps this bird is a bit older and it is going to get pushed out if it does not leave. Which usually happens in real life as you can see young adults left on the streets as they could not find the right work(learn to fly) in time.
These were just a couple of the meanings that I got out of this poem. It is a very meaningful read.
That's all from me,
Godly
Oh Godly, thank you very much for reviewing and liking this poem.. i was being criticized for past few days for my work, so your this kind words are working as motivational potion for me. Thank you, finally, someone understood what i tried to mean.
so nice of you. ^_^
No problem
^_^
I like how the title is Capitalized, works nice for the poem. I also really like the hidden meaning behind the poem. You used the common comparison of a birds flight very well.
I do see some grammatical errors through out it though. Multiple times you have used a capital when not needed, like,
"Fly Bird...... GO and fly up in the sky,
Never look back, no matter what you have left"
since you didn't use a period after sky, never should not be capitalized. You made that mistake quiet a few times through out the poem. You know, this may help: ABC's of Punctuation in Poetry , it won't hurt to read it over, you may learn something new!
Also, using capitalized words every now and then makes the poem look messy, and child-like. Try, instead, making words bold, italic, or underlined.
Keep writing!
- Phoenix
Thank you for your suggestions, I'll got through "ABC's of Punctuation in Poetry" and I intentionally capitalized some words which were probably not necessary. Sorry for that.
Hey there!
This was a sweet little poem! Easy to read, didnt go on forever rambling, yet it wasnt super short!
Im not sure what messages you wanted it to have! I see where it could have just been about a bird! But I pulled a lot more then that out of it!
It had a nice little final ring to it! 
haha now Im going to be quoting that last line over and over today! 
Its one of those you get stuck in your head! 
Josie here to review!!!
I liked it!
You did good! Good luck editing! I didnt have any suggestions! Everything looked good to me!
Oh I really liked the way you ended it though!!!
Josie
Thank you Josie.