Young Writers Society

Hey @Thediffident here to give you a review on your wonderful piece!

This was truly a sweet yet sad read. The way you described your thoughts via this piece made me feel connected and somewhat personally linked to it as well. Not a lot of writers are capable of making the readers feel a personal connection to a piece. The way you were able to accomplish that is truly incredible!

Furthermore, the metaphors you used in this poem contributed a lot in making this piece come alive. It gave new insights and it was so thrilling to read every new metaphor you came up with.

The title of the poem is truly amazing. It gives a jist of the piece and that too in a few simple words. It's captivating as well and is one of the main reasons I decided to review this piece. Bravo!

Your writing style was great! The language was clear and concise and I couldn't find any grammatical mistakes here as well. I loved the font you used in the poem. It gave a mesmerizing and great touch to your piece.

Overall, this piece was truly phenomenal. Consider me a fan of your work! I hope you liked the review <3
Love, Andy.

Hello there. This is Ina a.k.a loveissourgrapes speaking. I am here to give you a quick comment/review of your poem about childhood. Anyways, let's get into it.

I like how you described your childhood imagination fading away like a sky filled with clouds. The mentions of things children used to imagine about fairies and dragons. It may be sad to other people to grow up from those things but sometimes you can grow from it yet your imagination still has that touch of your childhood imagination and get to recall it even if they disappear today or tomorrow. We face reality to be knowledgeable about what's going around us and what we need to know and do when something bad faces us in reality and how to fight back against those things. This seems like a goodbye letter to childhood and all those little dreams you had when growing up. But now, you are old, except it and it is now time to face the reality and the danger around the wild world with different kinds of people and things.

Thank you for sharing such a poem. I love it. But I still imagine things because I'm still a teen but when I get older, I know they will disappear. Have a good morning, day, afternoon, or night.

hi!

you did such a good job of portraying the whole theme (which is growing up, I believe) throughout the entire poem. and I LOVEE angsty poetry and just in general, poetry like this.

The sky seems

so strange now

dark and unknown

and full of woe

Dragons and fairies

vanished from our

sky of imagination

maybe they got hidden

behind the black cloud

of realization

The stars of our twinkling dreams

The misty moon of peace

The hazy clouds of doubts

The sky of our childhood gaze

a moment is all it takes

for everything to be washed away

by the sorrowful rain of reality

Growing up is sad and facing reality is depressing. Everything we’ve ever imagined fades away. But we can find happiness in growing up. Of course it will never be the same as childhood happiness, but maybe that’s a good thing! We all grow into our own person. I thought that this was a beautiful and sad poem about growing up. I’ve enjoyed reading this poem that you wrote.

I wish you a great day/night.