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The Growing Dragons: The Dragon's Path (Chapters 1-5)

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Prologue:

Long ago, dragons filled the skies, each one gifted with a unique power. But when darkness came—disguised as celebration—only four young dragons, left behind by fate, survived. They were Ember, a 9 year old red fire dragon, with a temper, Luna a 10 year old dragon except with more of a calm vibe, using her water powers to calm Ember down, Kai an 11 year old who could see into the future, but wasn't always good at it, and Finn 11, but powerful, as he could read minds causing him to be extra mischievous. They had to survive against all sorts of crazy things, fire, depression, evil, crashes, and even worse but they got through it, somehow even against impossible odds. Millions of years later a young girl found a script and translated it. Then she made these books, based on their story, so now the whole world can see it, so here it is.

Chapter One: Kai, Finn, Ember, and Luna

Kai raced across the field as his teammates cheered. The score was tied, and there were only thirty seconds left in the game. He ran down the field, nearly tripping on his tail. Being a dragon made soccer so much harder.

He kicked the ball and it flew straight into the net.

“GOAL!”

Kai had just scored his first goal of the game — and won it for his whole team. He whipped his tail excitedly and jumped up and down as his teammates ran over to give him high-fives.

It was Friday, and every Friday the soccer team played their game. Even more students came to watch than the football game on Wednesdays. Nearly the whole grade had gathered to watch that day.

“Ah, He's so handsome.” Luna was a kid who always watched the small games they had on both their middle school soccer fields. Since it was also the basketball field, and just as the two teams were shaking hands, saying good game, the leader of the basketball team came up and pushed.

“Hey, are you watching the game?”

“Ahhh… Where… Where did you come from?”

“I was just up on the hill, apparently they don't allow popcorn on the playground. Hey, that guy is pushing around that guy who just scored that goal. Oh, he knocked him out!” Luna looked down and, sure enough, the leader of the football team came up and pushed Kai and one of the other team members he was shaking hands with, Adein.

That got Luna mad. She stomped down and nearly screamed at him, saying, “Hey, leave him alone!”

“Why should I?!”

“Because, it's Friday, not Wednesday.”

“Well we didn't get to play on Wednesday!”

“Remember it was a parent teacher conference day.”

“So, take Thursday!”

“Oh yeah, why do you even care, do you like hi…” [thud!] Luna had done something she never knew she had in her, she punched him in the face.

Chapter Two: Trouble?

“Why would you do something like that? You've always been such a good student in the past, what happened?”

Luna didn't know what to say, she had only been in the principal's office for awards, not for being in trouble. “I… uh I'm.”

“What you did was wrong, but I can understand why you did it. The teacher on shift said that the captain of the basketball team came and pushed people when they were shaking hands on their day then soon after you came up to him, started arguing, she started to come up, but before she did, you punched him. Can you tell me why?”

“He was bullying Ka. .. I mean the team.”

“I have to call your mom, you and Greg will both be suspended.” A couple minutes later she had called Luna's mom, and then 5 more minutes after that she was there.

Chapter Three: GROUNDED?!

“Luna, why did you do that?! You are in big trouble young Missy!”

“Trouble?”

“Yes, trouble, it's so unlike you to do that! You're grounded”

“But mom the par…”

“No buts, go to your room.”

“Yes mother.”

“And Ember!”

“Yes mom, I can tell you anything you need to know.”

“Then tell me why you brought food to school, not during lunch and at recess!”

“Uh technically they never said I couldn't.”

“Yes they did.”

“Ember, this is serious, yes they did, this is the tenth time I have had to tell you.”

“Ninth, mom, ninth.” “You know what, I'm done with this, you're grounded to!”

“What? Nooooooooo!” Ember stomped into her room and immediately blamed her sister, and they started squabbling.

Chapter Four: She Likes You

“Uh um where am I?” Kai asked slowly, waking up.

“Oh my baby boy you're awake.” his dad said, hugging him tight.

“Uh dad… dad I think I need to breathe.”

“Oh sorry, too tight?”

“Yeah a little bit.”

“Are you ok?”

“Yeah, I think so.”

“But what happened?”

“That’s what I was going to ask you.”

“May I?” asked his brother Finn.

“Yeah, sure.” “Well first the basketball leader came up and hit you down to the floor, knocking you unconscious. Then there was this kid, Luna, I think the one in my math class. She watches all your games, I did realize mainly at you in particular. I think she likes you. Anyway, she came up to him, trash talking him. Then she punched him in the face. Huh, like me. Wait, totally forgot, I had a vision well I was knocked out!”

Five: The Vision!

Kai, when knocked unconscious by Greg at the soccer field, had a vision about all the dragons dying at the yearly festival, the Great Gathering. Kai's vision was unlike any he’d ever had. He saw that the dragons somehow got poisoned but his vision faded before he saw how. He told Finn, who read his mind and immediately believed him. Then their parents, who told them it was like the time Kai had a vision where all the dragons turned into marshmallows. Except Finn believed him this time. Then they tried to warn their parents again. Finn backed him up, even reading their minds to find the best words. But nothing worked. The Parents had made up their minds, and the kids had as well. They were going.

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Kivaya Review
Kivaya wrote a review · Fri Jun 26, 2026 6:43 pm

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I personally loved this novel so much! It is so well written and I loved the plot.
Although, a little feedback from me, maybe put a little wording of who's saying what in those long dialogue paragraphs. Ex:
'“Why should I?!”

“Because, it's Friday, not Wednesday.”

“Well we didn't get to play on Wednesday!”

“Remember it was a parent teacher conference day.”

“So, take Thursday!”'

These don't exactly clarify who's speaking. I once got confused about who was saying what, but then when I followed, it became clear after a little bit.

Anyway, it's a great one and can't wait to read the next chapters!

Eywa ngahu.
~Kivaya

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Dragons4Life Comment

I actually wrote this as a book first but before I published it I wanted advice and to know what people thought so thank you for that. With advice I wish to use I will use it in the book. In book one there are about 11,500 words. It is going to be what's called a novelette, and has three parts about 65 chapters total.

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Dragons4Life Comment

hope you like it!

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Dragons4Life Comment

Chapters six through thirteen are out now! Check them out, and please like and leave a review on then now.

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alliyah
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Hi there welcome to YWS! Hope you're enjoying it so far - thank you for sharing your story with us!

I love the personality and power you gave to your dragon characters to make them feel distinctive and interesting. Luna comes across as the "peace-keeper" and Ember a bit more reactive, which creates a great tension between the two.

The dialogue between the siblings felt like authentic sibling-bickering, and you had some good moments of humor too like when Ember gets corrected on how many times they've been in trouble.

I think as you move forward with the story deepening the world-building so we can understand how the dragon's world works and functions will be something to develop more. Is their society just like our human-society with dragons or are there some big differences?

Another aspect to watch a bit is pacing - the jump between the soccer field and the principal’s office happens very quickly. You might try slowing the scene down a bit to give the readers a window into Luna's feelings / what she sees / what her emotions are in the moment, to give us the weight of the situation. Developing important aspects of your scenes with the five senses is a great way to add a little more depth and interest to your writing and make the story really "come alive"!

I liked how ended us on a good old fashioned cliff-hanger!

Thanks for sharing! Keep writing forever!

alliyah

Thank you for writing back and reading this. I actually wrote this as a book first but before I published it I wanted advice and to know what people thought so thank you for that. With advice I wish to use I will use it in the book. This is only the start cause, spoiler there are about 11,500 words. It is going to be what's called a novelette, and has three parts about 65 chapters total. Again thank you for the comment and more chapters will be out soon.

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the mortifying S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - This is about four dragons who will go through crazy things together to survive the turmoil that will be thrown their way, but of course, it must start with something mundane, like a basketball game…but wait…Kai got a vision!

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I think that there should be more description about the vision that Kai had, but that is all.

Chocolate Bar - I like how Luna gets so mad at the football coach that she punches him, it shows how she is ready to do what she thinks is right, even if it puts her in trouble. I also like how different Luna and Ember are from each other, it will be interesting to see how that will develop their characters!

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a fun first set of chapters. I’ve enjoyed reading this and I will be sure to read more chapter sets when you post them and so, I wish you…

A fabulous day/night! ^v^

Thank you for the comment and I will add more chapters soon. Have a good day\night too.

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SanaPathan
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Hey there! I was really really intrigued by the prologue. I think the concept and the idea of the book is really interesting!

Now I am a little confused. Are the chapters set before all the dragons except the 4 kids die?

I am curious to see what happens at the great gathering!

-Sana

Thank you, more chapters coming soon. And yes, it is placed before all the dragons except Ember Luna Kai and Finn die.



I am deeply disturbed by your ability to meow.
— Carina