Young Writers Society

Hello! Great poem for sure! I can feel lots of emotion behind it. The rhyme scheme/rhythm is really nice too. It definitely adds to the fluency of the piece. I especially love the religious aspect of this! It's so good and in my opinion explains the grace and love of God really well! Keep on writing! you're really good!

Hi there DoubleRiders! Niteowl here to leave a quick review.

I like the idea behind this poem. It's great to recognize someone in your life who's giving and sacrificing of themselves. People's efforts often go unappreciated, so I'm sure whoever this was meant for would find it nice. The rhyming is also pretty good.

However, I feel like there could be more to this poem. Right now, it reads more like a greeting card. It could be about anyone. If I were writing something about a specific person, I'd want to showcase their qualities using specific examples. Show me how giving this person is. As an example, I might think of my late Yia-Yia (Greek for grandma) and how she would make tons of food for family, friends, and church events. It would be interesting to understand the relationship between the speaker and their friend and see what exactly this friend does.

Also, there's an awful lot of repetition of "gift" and "give". Repetition can be an effective poetic tool, but it can also feel like too much, especially in a shorter poem.

Now, my friend, a few words of advice,
There are those who will always despise,
The gift you give them of yourself,
Remember then: He gave not for Himself!