non-borscht

Hello!

Intriguing poem. I wish I knew more about what you were aiming for. Like Cas down there, I also thought maybe it was supposed to be humorous, but I liked reading it as more dramatic if I'm honest.

I have had borscht a couple times, and never really liked it. Correct me if I'm wrong, but it's made out of beets, not potatoes. So I'm guessing that's why it's titled "non-borscht?" Also, does it have butter and cream in it? I feel like it doesn't.

My best guess at what this poem is trying to say is that beets are just potatoes that have been corrupted by the Russians, and someone has like, a beet in front of them, about to eat it like a baked potato, with butter and cream, and this poem is what someone says to that person.

And maybe it's also a metaphor for the Russian government like, ruining something? I'm not sure what the butter and cream would represent though.

Basically, I guess I'm saying that this poem is too obscure to really mean anything as it is. I'd love it if there were some more obvious things going on here.

You do have a nice tone going on though. I'll give you that. Something about the word choice you did use here gives a quite intriguing tone.

Anyway, I feel like this review wasn't super great, but I did the best I could with what I had to work with. If you have any specific questions, feel free to let me know!

Keep writing!

~fortis

Hey there! Happy Review Day!

So I clicked on this poem because I LOVE Borscht! My grandma used to make it every time we'd visit and yeah. Such good memories. So tasty.

But then I was a little disappointed because I was hoping for a little more I guess! Poetry doesn't have to be long to be impactful, but I didn't feel like this was one of those poems that really left me in awe in spite of it's shortness. Sure, it is sorta humorous perhaps, due to the way it's formatted an just because it's kinda ridiculous the thought of someone poisoning potatoes.

But why? What do you want readers to take away from this poem? To feel cautious of potatoes forever more? While I'll admit, that's a pretty good takeaway (but I love potatoes so at the same time, NOT ) Why?

Beside giving this poem a bit more meat in general, I feel like the words chosen could be a bit stronger. There's not much particularly poetic about the words chosen, and they're all fairly common words that really don't invoke any real new images or concept in our minds when we read this. Perhaps there's a way to say this in a way that's a tab more signature to yourself? Part of it as well is that this is mostly just a statement, and statements aren't always that poetic. So my advice is to not concentrate on the idea of butter and cream being fine, and not concentrate on the potato being poisoned. But instead, perhaps paint an image of a sensible woman terrified of potatoes due to her time in Russia Or cautious of food in general, for that matter.

And give us more. We want to know more about WHY russia would poison potatoes, and why just the potatoes and not also the butter and cream! Tell us more.

Anyways, I hope this helps some! Keep it up!

-Holysocks

Heya, DEA. This is Casanova here to review for you. It won't be much of a review, but I'm gonna take a shot at this anyway.

So I wasn't sure if this was a reference to something, or if it was meant to be humourous. Either way it's not something I completely understand. But I'll take a crack at something.

So, if it's something dealing with a reference, I know at least it's dealing with Soup(which is what borscht is, if i'm not mistaken?). But, I couldn't find anything relating to this, so if it's a reference, I would like you to explain to me, if you would, what reference it is?

Now, as a joke. I'll admit, as a joke this would be pretty hilarious. You take a friend out, tell them 2/3 of their food items are fine, but one of them is poisoned, and see if they take the risk. Or unless the potato is actually poisoned, in which case I feel sorry for the,"you," in this scenario because, well, if they don't believe the narrator then they're going to pretty much either be really sick, or, well, dead.

The humour aspect was the first thing to pop in my mind, then I though of an episode of Family Guy about Russian spies, and sleeper agents, in which case I thought that it might have been a mix of both, but I wasn't for sure.

I know this didn't help any, but feel free to find me around and explain it to me.

Keep on doing what you're doing.

Sincerely, Casanova.