Young Writers Society

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That is quite the poem! I love your use of imagery, it allows the reader to picture exactly what is happening, and I know it’s a bit difficult to do that in a poem. And your description isn’t overdone either. It gives just enough for the reader to picture what is happening, but also leaves room for wordplay and interpretation.

On misty days and grief drenched mornings,
When sight is blurry and life a dark ride,
I see you drunk with perplexion and
Lost in wonderous complexities.

Sunflower here for a review!

When I tell you that this poem made me cry I really do mean it. This poem conveyed deep emotion of seeing people hurt so beautifully, like it gave me goosebumps. I love the idea of the sun being sad for us. Of course I don't like the sun beine sad but as in the idea of the poem is all. I also think it's cool you used the sun instead of the moon, because in all the poems I've ever read I feel like people always lean towards the moon when talking about human suffering. Maybe it's because the moon is closer but I have no clue! Any way that not the point of my review, the point of my review was to tell you that I wish more people could see beautiful work because you definitely deserve it and I wish more people could read things like this because I feel like so many think poetry is boring but it's things like this that would prove them otherwise. I think that's all I really have to say other than once more stating I love love love this poem and I'd love to see more of you work! Thank you for reading my review and I hope you have a great day/night, much love from sunflower bye!


Tldr: I loved this so freaking much, and I tlak to much!

This is a fun poem! I like how it gives off the feeling of victory and hope.Like no matter what happens there will still be hope for a better future.There’s always tomorrow.It’s just like Annie from the musical said “The sun will come out tomorrow.” I’m an Annie fan haha.I really like this.I hope you have a nice day/night.

Hey it's Gem. I am a bit rusty at reviewing but I will do my best.

Things that caught my eye.

Well mourn me not is just an interesting title. It made me immediately curious. The first stanza is also very artistic. Though the line drunk with perplexion was just chef's kiss. Then you have an oxymoron oh how much I love those !! Magical realism is just so enchanting sounding! My favorite part would have to be the last two lines however very uplifting and inspiring.

Constructive criticism/ advice

You have every right to ignore this but maybe you can find some help here. The line with forthcoming is nice and not redundant but it does start with for so it kind of steps on it's own toes it feels like you predict the last word before reading it which is great if you want that effect but personally I like surprises!🙂

The word quotidian is bound to make someone pull up a dictionary, so if you don't like the disconnect you could find a more common word or you could keep it and inadvertently or maybe purposefully teach a few people a new word!

I would love to see you try lower case poetry without punctuation, your writing voice is just beautiful.

Other than that I don't have any other nitpicks haha.

Keep writing and being cool!

This is Gem leaping back into the dragon's den.😉🤘