Hi cow!
I am here for a quick review. Your poem had a lot of strong emotions coming out and I liked how you made two conflicting emotions. The one's aligned in the middle sort of revealed more about the inner suppressed feelings. I guess they added more power to your poem. I liked this idea of using the metaphor of brick with rope stuck at the bottom of a lake. I mean I always get that sort of negative feeling so I could relate with it.
The line where you mentioned about dressing made me realise of what the idea behind this could be. It can be really frustrating to be judged and follow the rules that others think is important. We are often expected to meet the expectations of the society and our parents that makes our own choices get buried deep within us.
You have already mentioned about your choice for italicizing and bolding certain words that you wanted to put emphasis on them. I really like your style.
Overall it was a very intriguing piece and had a lot of powerful emotions. I am very impressed with your poem.
Great work!
Keep writing
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