in the dawn of spring

Hello, BlueSunset! I am here to give you a review. I love how the imagery is just so clear to see, I mean your poem is very clear. I only have one problem and that is that some lines break off at weird points. I don't think poems are suppose to split at then and there, but again I could be wrong. I must say that this is a beautiful piece and has a good meaning. This poem was just really good! This might be random,but, I think the title that you put really fit the poem. I don't know why it just really caught my eye, sorry I'm saying to much, oops. Well, I'm sorry that is all I could say. I'm trying to be better at reviewing so that will take me a while... but anyway!
I love your piece, and goodbye!

hey I'm here for another review.

So lets start:
its a beautiful piece although the meaning of it is not clear.
I find there is a lot of meaning behind this and it shows.
I don't know if the brackets where supposed to be there but they look a bit out of place
there is also not much punctuation if that is on purpose ok but I fell like if I read this to my little brother it would be difficult to do the first sentence without gasping for breath afterwards.


I'm sorry there isn't much I can say as I am new to doing reviews once I get better I will come back and to a better review. keep up the good work.

Hello, BlueSunset! ObsidianLight here for a review! If you have any comments or questions please feel free to reply or PM me. Please remember; you do not have to do or listen to anything I have to say! This is based off of my opinions.

I first wanna say, I love imagery, and the imagery in this was beautiful and clear. The beginning, I swear I could taste the fruit, see the drops cascading down dirty cheeks. Like fruity tears. I could feel the texture of the fruit. I'm not sure what the fruit was, but I saw some kind of orange, like a normal one or (my favorite) and blood orange.

I'm not sure what else to really comment on, the imagery was the only thing that really caught my eye. Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Good job! I give you a thumbs up!

-Obsidian

I really like the way this poem makes me imagine. It has a nice context , also.

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

This was a nice poem, and I don't really have much to say, since there wasn't much to comment on. I would like to compliment you on the formatting. This poem was simply formatted, but in a way that wasn't boring. It also made sense, with the parenthetical phrase farther right to seperate it from the rest of the poem.

My only complaint with this poem is the occasions where you break lines in weird places.

"As juice runs down dirt-covered
cheeks..."