This world

by Bliese

Published December 18, 2014

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How can we stand idly by and watch this world burn to the ground; 

into ashes of black nothingness 

I grimace at the thought of our world.

And how If you listen deeply within the trees you can almost here the screams. 

Our world is growing old.

And I no longer know how much it can hold. 

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LoreleiZwicky commented Comment · Dec 27, 2014

Very good.

The only thing I can say is maybe shorten the last line.

Good job.

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LoreleiZwicky commented Comment · Dec 27, 2014

Very good.

The only thing I can say is maybe shorten the last line.

Good job.

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ilovegeeks wrote a review Review · Dec 18, 2014

Hey geeky here !!:)

Good job on this poem you poet master !! I seriously love all your work and I could sit around and reAd it all day!

First I wanna say good job on putting it in a stanza :)

One thing that caught my eye was the recurrence of the word world... I didn't think it was necessary... It doesn't make it look bad though it is just something that caught my eye!!

We'll keep up the good work girl:) keep posting I can't wait to see future work

-GeEkY

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brielle wrote a review Review · Dec 18, 2014

Hello Im brielle. and I Love this Poem. It has good Image, I love how said

"you How can we stand idly by and watch this world burn to the ground;
into ashes of black nothingness" . I love it but theres one thing thats bugging me about this its to short. I dont know if you have a writers block or whatever but if you do then you can ask me to help there's nothing wrong with that. Also I believe this poe has so much Good things coming for it. Make it longer because i felt like i should be reading more of this. This is REAL LIFE. This is what is happing i wish yu can see it for your self. because as you ended, i felt like it shouldve been more to carry it on. I felt like i could add my 2 or 3 sentences in there like i can edit my self well ADD More on. But Please keep writing i like this alot. but i have to go now so BYEEEEE!

Bliese replied · Dec 18, 2014

Thanks for the thoughts, I think it should be longer to! And yes I defiantly do have writers block

Yes, well anytime you want to get out of it let me know okay.
Because i get it too so, just let me know anytime

Bliese replied · Dec 18, 2014

I'd love to get out of it. How do I do it?

A %u201Cknock, knock%u201D joke... or Words I think are funny or
What I know about stars .. but sometimes i think the writers blocks get there because you think about stuff to much and it wants you to stop and wait for a mintue but yeah or you can write about Santa Claues, Christmas, or the best thing that ever happened or "What if toys could talk?"



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