ARIAM
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That's right my love I no longer bleed
My heart has moved on and no longer has need
And since that day I'm doing quite fine
I can sleep easily now, I'm no longer losing my mind
My mind it's odd but there's no longer sound
And the voices that were here, are no longer around
It's incredible,amazing, this feeling of being free
But why is it that no one but you can see me?
Either way I'm happy,
Like a dream has been fulfilled.
I'm so happy it wasn't you
And it was me that I killed
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Oh wow! this is really intense.
I enjoyed it and how it is really dark yet it has a light hearted feel to it in how you wrote it.
I don't really like the spacing I think that breaking it up into stanzas would work well but it is up to you.
The ending is really unexpected, I seriously had no idea that that was the direction it was going in.
The flow is great and well done but just be careful because every now and then the rhyme sounds forced.
Good job and keep it up!
This is about YKW, isn't it?
Shut the flip up Balls, lol, no it isn't actually....not everything is about him >.>
Or is it? :O
Nope. Over it, completley
Winkers