The Jobber

by AntonioVidalZ

Published May 30, 2025

18+ Language Violence Mature Content

In Storywork

Warning: This work has been rated 18+ for language, violence, and mature content.

Dad powerbombed El Guero onto the ring as the referee counted to three.

"The winner of the match as form of pinfall, Red Fantasma!"

I came to the ring with my sister, she hugged Dad, but all I could focus on was my reflection on the belt over his shoulder. That day was the day I knew everything I needed.

After my teenage years, I became my own man, and a bit after Dad got sick, I became a wrestler.

"The winner of this match as form of pinfall, Brett Buckley!"

It took some time to get accepted by the GWF and even longer to be pushed up the card. I was no longer Raul, I was Vato Loco. I dressed like a gangster, with a bandana and all. Street clothes and undershirt, the whole deal. My sister was always at ringside, then she decided to actually be by the ring side as my manager. She could never take seeing me get hurt.

"The winner of this match as form of pinfall, Brett Buckley."

This was the last time I lost as Vato Loco, I couldn't take losing anymore, if I didn't get that belt, I was ready to hang up my boots.

General Manager's GWF office was much smaller than I imagined it. I told her that I was beaten up and I couldn't do this anymore. I was going back to Mexico to wrestle in the independent circuit again before joining GWF. She wasn't reluctant.

As I walked out the door my sister was opening it and storming in.She demanded the title shot much better than me as she convinced that stubborn GM to give me a chance at that belt. With one condition of course.

See, wrestling is all about the audience. My territory does not want to see a luchador as champion, they need a Brett Buckley. So if I were to be champion, I wouldn't be champ as Vato Loco, but as Alan Long. I would have to denounce my lucha libre style, and be turned into a joke. More of a joke than Vato Loco.

I had to say yes, for Dad, and for the belt. The locker room that day felt cold and isolated. As I was ready to leave the locker room my manager stopped me and told me to just go home.

"Don't do this to yourself, Raul. Think about what you're doing."

"I did, if Dad were here."

"Dad is dead!"

I turned my back on her, I felt her try to stop me by putting her hand in my back pocket, but I was already on my way out to the ring. The crowd screamed at me with vice and hate. I was getting heat that night. Almost like they knew I was going to be the champion.

Brett came out, all United States as a person type style. He got out the mic.

"Tonight I make an example of your kind, this is America, and it's time you learn your place, Vato."

He rushed to the ring and beat me to pieces. It was personal. He went for a back breaker, and delivered. My back stung. As I reached behind my back to ease the pain, I felt something familiar. Something I knew could only be my sister's fault. I took my Red Fantasma's mask from my back pocket and strapped it to my face. I was no longer Raul, nor Vato Loco, and I refused to become Alan Long, I was Loco Fantasma and I was ready to put Brett Buckley into an armbar.

He countered, but so did I. And I flung off the ropes into his left arm. I put the guy into a Lobell lock and was ready to make him tap out.

I put more force into the hold, and eventually got Brett to cry uncle as his hand bounced off the mat repeatedly. That's when I heard that stupid voice.

"Don't ring that bell. Stop the match. As General Manager of this here federation, I'm changing up the stipulations, this is now a no submission, no disqualifications, deportation match."

I was being screwed. I knew something like this would happen. But my Dad was taking me over, Loco Fantasma was not one to go down without a fight. The crowd was estatic, at the cletch of their teeth, they had no idea what would happen next, as neither did anyone else.

I put Brett between the ropes ready to Devil Cross him but as I Irish whip him out of the ropes, that damn GM blinds me with chalk. It was what seemed the end for me, all I worked for, gone. And for what? A belt that would make me a joke?

Lucky for me, there was a chair at ringside. Was.

It found its way to the spine of the GM as my sister threw the chair to the side. 

The crowd continued to explode. I heard them deafen my ears, I didn't even feel Brett's backdrop. He super kicked me hard. But as soon as he went for the pin, my sister pulled me out of the ring.

We hugged, and I thanked her like we were kids again.

"Don't sweat it. Come on. Let's get out of here."
As the ref counted to 10, my sister and I walked out on the GWF, as the crowd started throwing stuff at us, booing and hollering. I could barely hear them. I could hear my sister smiling, though. Our future awaited us out that curtain, ready to go back as Loco Fantasma.

"The winner of this match as form of count out, Brett Buckley."

Comments & reviews · 2
creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Jul 10, 2025

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the spooky S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Raul’s father was a wrestler and now, Raul himself is a wrestler, but he’s not doing too great, so his sister (who is also his manager), helps him out by giving him the mask of their father and so, a fight ensues.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I think that you meant to put a space between “storming in” and “she”, but that’s just one little thing.

Chocolate Bar - I love how you described the narrator’s determination to win for his Dad, because it shows that he really looked up to his father and wants to prove that he won’t give up. I also like the part where he put his Dad’s mask on, as it felt like his Dad was there, helping him out, even though it was all just the narrator. The connection between him and his sister was nice too, it shows that they would be there for each other when their Dad wasn’t there anymore.

Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a marvelous short story! I enjoyed reading this and I am glad that it all ended well for them. The crowd may not have liked them but at least Raul kept on fighting and he always has his sister by his side and their Dad watching over them both in spirit. With that being said, I wish you…

A magical day/night! ^v^

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TheRebel2007 wrote a review Review · May 31, 2025

Hey there, The Rebel here from Team Mint for a short review!

An Overview: A compelling tale, to say the least - a son following his father's footsteps with his sister helping him in every step, finally realising what he truly wants and goes into the sunset to pursue a new life. I am really surprised to see how much you managed to tell and unpack within like 750 words or something around that - with foreshadowing, character development and witty lines sprinkled throughout. Probably the only thing bad about this was that it was too short, and also a small mistake (check "The Criticism).

The Glows: I don't know much about commercial wrestling or WWE-style things in general, however, I feel like you somehow managed to showcase the struggles and troubles faced by new and upstart wrestlers - even if it's a fictional version of it. The characters (Alan Long/Vato Loco/Raul, his sister and their father's overaching presence in the form of legacy) felt very real, lively and relatable. The writing style, though simple, was powerful enough to convey the message of the story. And well - I don't have much else to say, it's almost perfect.

The Criticism: Speaking of [i]almost perfect[/i:-

..."I did, if Dad were here."...

I think there should have been an "only" before "if Dad were here" to have the sentence make sense, because otherwise, it doesn't make complete sense even in context. Except that, the only bad thing about this story is that it ended.

The Conclusion: A great story. 9.8/10.

Signing off,

The Rebel



When a person tells you you hurt them, you don't get to decide you didn't.
— Louis C. K.