The Voices
The Voices have been ringing for some time now in my head. As soon as I drift off to sleep, they fill every corner of my mind, whispering and chanting like tribesmen around a fire. Occasionally, a different kind of Voice can be heard - one that is enchanting and chromatic in its sound. It's tone as soft as a cloud, yet so clear and crisp, like a clear summer sky. It pierces my heart, and I'm sure that I cry in my dreams now. This Voice soon fades away though, as if scared by my conscience. The others return, and I return to the sleepless nights where I wake up, sweat trickling down my face, questioning my sanity and wondering what I have done to deserve this torture.
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
125,020 Literary Works • 672,861 Reviews
I loved this story it really made me ask a lot of questions. It was very descriptive and interesting
Many thanks
Like Veeren said I am also intrigued with hat these voices are and I ask that you continue on with the concept. The only error I could really notice was the use of the - I did not see really the point for them and felt that they broke up the flow of the story. I normally just use a comma or half colon ; when I want to connect two things. Besides all that the story was good and I hope you continue improving on your concept.
Thanks for the advice
I am now considering continuing and more explanation is needed! Thx again 
Honestly, I feel like I need an explanation 0.o
I couldn't help but wonder what these 'voices' are. Me having the mental problems I do, immediately thought of someone being possessed and the voices being the result. The fact these only happened during sleep and were always bad only strengthened the theory in my mind.
But yeah some backstory would be nice
But nice writing anyway!
Thanks, I'll try and put more detail into my future stories!
AWESOME, im sooo sharing this with my friends....
Thanks! Really appreciate the feedback
God I hate the voices!
Yeah! They were quite terrifying to write about! Thx for commenting!