Hello, my name is Emily. I'm blind. I was born blind. I've never seen the “pretty” sky. I've never seen a “handsome” face. I have only felt the things that I have touched. I have a rough picture of what things look like, but I've never seen them so I wouldn't know. With blindness comes many problems. One of which is that I couldn't read this. Try to imagine being blind. You can't. You've seen the world; therefore you can't imagine not seeing the world.
Try this, imagine yourself as a featureless being with only what people tell you that you have: two arms, two legs, one head, two eyes, one nose, one mouth, ten fingers, ten toes. Now, try to imagine not being able to see yourself but still knowing what you generally look like. Before we continue, you need to picture all of this in a colorless, shapeless room. Do you have all of this imagined? Let's begin.
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Hey, thanks so much for your input. It was very helpful an I hope to release the rest of the Prologue. I hope part two clears up a few things as well.
Hey Hey!
How are you? I see your new? WELCOME! ready for a review?
Overall thoughts: Being blind is....I mean, sight is one of the biggest tools that we use in our life! Everyday! So, no I cannot begin to imagine what it's like to loose or be born without it. A lot of respect to people who have.
Little things:
"One of which is that I couldn't read this" Well, she could read this? In braille? Right?
"Now, try to imagine not being able to see yourself but still knowing what you generally look like." I cannot imagine what this would be like. This is something I never thought of. But tell me more about this. It feels like you've cut down everything you actually want to say.
To the story, it's very short, even for a prologue, not that there is something wrong with that. I just feel like there could be more to it. Tell me what colours mean to her! Tell me how much she hates not being able to know truly what her parents look like. Or that she isn't useless and that she can do everything I can.
I feel like this prologue has told me two things while there are a million things that I still want to know about. TELL ME MORE. please.
For the rest: Cannot wait to read more. Emily seems like an awesome girl and she feels like a soul with a lot to tell.
Love,
Lau.
Thanks. I've been hoping someone would be this blunt with what hey want to appreciate that.
One more thing. Yes, she could read it in Braille but it's really hard to read Braille. I'm speaking from my own experience when I say that's it's more than a little hard to read a series of combinations of six lumps on a paper. I'm also releasing sections at a time.
Hey AnnMath it's Oreos here for a review!
First off do you have a title for this yet? I would really like to know because I am interested to see where this goes. I like how you started this. You state the simple facts throughout and I like also how you got me to at least try and imagine it. And you're right I could not. I really like your descriptions in this prologue about what it is like to be blind. Do you have experience with a blind person. These details are so vivid and what I would think would be exact that I would have to guess.I am really intrigued by this. I saw no grammar errors so congratulations on that! You did an incredible job with this again. Overall this was not bad for a prologue and I see potential in this writing. Let me know when you post Chapter 1 will ya? Keep writing and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
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I like it!