Appreciating Life
We never are satisfied with
The glories of our life…
The glory of being our own self…
And the glory of
Exploring ourselves…
The realization of
How much we have in life-
Fails to raise us to the epitome of happiness!
But that of how much we don’t have-
Is what makes us fall into
The dark shallow dungeons of
An unfulfilled, unhappy life!
It wins over our willingness-
The willingness to accept the gifts of life!
It wins over our insight-
The insight to see the happiness,
Through all the hardships in life;
It wins over our purpose-
Of living life to its fullest!
Moreover, it wins over us-
We, a true unique soul-
Who are created for a greater cause.
Is that the purpose of life?
Is that what we are born for?
To feel low and die-
An undignified death?
No, no, no-
It never was that way,
And it never will be.
Life is for us to live
And embrace our innate goodness,
For us to improvise ourselves!
For us to serve the nature,
And to be a true resource to mankind;
To see the different colors of the world;
And to see through the hardships;
For our life is transparent:
Sure it has hurdles on its way-
But it’s a guaranteed success
On the other side;
Which is worth fighting for…
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Hi ABHISHIKA, Felistia here with a short review on your poem.
I really like this poem. It is a very interesting read and flows really well. The punctuation is perfect and I can't see any grammar mistakes.
I do have a small nit-pick though. You used the word glory way to much in the beginning of the poem and it took away from the poem. Other than that though it was great poem. Well done. I look forward to more of your work and I hope you have a great day\night.
Hey, ABHISHIKA!
First of all, welcome to Young Writers Society, I hope you enjoy your experience as a member of this creativity society!
Second of all, great poem! I loved the realism you have incorporated throughout the poem, it was believeable and there were so many things about it that were true with regards to life and society. You have a insightful way of observing the world around you and certainly have the potential to become a wonderful poet!
Continue to write poetry, my friend! Oh, and just a little tip for future reference: write about topics that interest you the most or certain subjects that you feel very strongly about. That way your personality will likely shine through the words written in the poem and a reflection of your true nature will be revealed!
MissLyricz x
thank you for your appreciation, it really means a lot! And I will definitely work on your tip....
No problem!
All the best for the future x
finally, a positive poem! how sweet and true this whole thing is. we take it all for granted. Kudos to you for positivity!!