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The Three Suicides (Or, The Reporter's Song)

by 4revgreen


Demo version of me singing this badly: here

Instrumental demo of an older version: here

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The reporter is reporting on the three suicides. She is standing centrestage, holding up the front page of the newspaper each time a new suicide has occurred.


(Speaking)

BREAKING NEWS: BUSINESSMAN TAKES DEADLY PILL IN ABANDONED OFFICE


Jeffrey Patterson: The first suicide

Why would he want to take his own life?

A well paying job, a loving wife

Did he really want to die?


(Speaking)

BREAKING NEWS: STUDENT TAKES DEADLY PILL IN SPORTS CENTRE


James Phillimore: The second suicide

Left his friend to escape from the rain

And ended up with poison in his veins

‘He wouldn’t have done this’, his mother cried


(Speaking)

BREAKING NEWS: TRANSPORT MINISTER TAKES DEADLY PILL IN WORKER’S PORTACABIN


Beth Davenport: The third suicide

Now the Minister of transport to the afterlife

No one understand not even her wife

She told us that she misses her ‘beautiful bride’


(Speaking)

BREAKING NEWS: ALL THREE TOOK THE SAME POISON


And on the case is Scotland Yard

This one is driving Lestrade Berserk!

But you can’t have serial suicides

No, that just wouldn’t work!


I’m a reporter and I report the facts

But these three dead in such a short time-

Let’s ask Lestrade, see how he reacts!

Lestrade, Is suicide even a crime?


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Sun Jan 31, 2021 5:20 am
ChesTacos wrote a review...



I commented on this work earlier but I decided why not write a review? So here I am! First of all like I said earlier I love this, I think you represented this episode very well in the dialogue of the news reporter. I like how it slowly escalates as you write each headline. A few things I noticed, first of all here. I also love the usage of rhyme in this.

The first suicide


I don't think this makes sense. Since this seems to unfold instead of the reporter talking about past events he would have no reason to suspect further suicides like this so I'm not sure why he would say The first suicide.

Lestrade, Is suicide even a crime?


I don't think is should be capitalized but if it's your writing style than ignore this. Overall great work! I love the use of rhyme and the way this unfolded and the way you portrayed this episode. You know what? I just love everything about this. Wonderful work! I hope to see more of this Sherlock musical!




4revgreen says...


Thank you so much!



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Fri Jan 29, 2021 7:55 pm
ChesTacos says...



AAAAAHHHHH!!! IK THIS EPISODE!!! ITS THE ONE WITH THE

Spoiler! :
TAXI DRIVER!!!!


the above is a spoiler btw




4revgreen says...


YESS! A STUDY IN PINK!! :-) the very first ep, it's so good right lmao



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Fri Jan 29, 2021 2:18 pm
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Oh wow. Oh WOW. STILL LOVING THIS. SO MUCH.
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What really amazes me is how well you wrote the episodes so well into songs. I find it really hard to write a song about any topic and have it sound good. You accomplish that, and it sounds amazing! If you wouldn't mind, when you post these, please tag me so I don't miss them! :)

There were a few grammatical errors that I wanted to point out, so here you go!

‘He wouldn’t have done this’, his mother cried

The quotation here is a little wrong, so let me correct it! (:

"He wouldn't have done this," his mother cried

This one is driving Lestrade Berserk!

Berserk doesn't need to be capitalized here.

Lestrade, Is suicide even a crime?

Same thing with Is.

That's it! Great job with this; I can't wait to read/listen to more!!
Momo




4revgreen says...


thank you so much! and thanks again for pointing out the grammatical errors for me! My writing partner had to edit the WHOLE original script for the episode so it would fit a stage show and then we turned each 'scene' into a song which is quite fun to do :-)




The fellow who thinks he knows it all is especially annoying to those of us who do.
— Harold Coffin