Demo version of me singing this badly: here
Instrumental demo of an older version: here
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The reporter is reporting on the three suicides. She is standing centrestage, holding up the front page of the newspaper each time a new suicide has occurred.
(Speaking)
BREAKING NEWS: BUSINESSMAN TAKES DEADLY PILL IN ABANDONED OFFICE
Jeffrey Patterson: The first suicide
Why would he want to take his own life?
A well paying job, a loving wife
Did he really want to die?
(Speaking)
BREAKING NEWS: STUDENT TAKES DEADLY PILL IN SPORTS CENTRE
James Phillimore: The second suicide
Left his friend to escape from the rain
And ended up with poison in his veins
‘He wouldn’t have done this’, his mother cried
(Speaking)
BREAKING NEWS: TRANSPORT MINISTER TAKES DEADLY PILL IN WORKER’S PORTACABIN
Beth Davenport: The third suicide
Now the Minister of transport to the afterlife
No one understand not even her wife
She told us that she misses her ‘beautiful bride’
(Speaking)
BREAKING NEWS: ALL THREE TOOK THE SAME POISON
And on the case is Scotland Yard
This one is driving Lestrade Berserk!
But you can’t have serial suicides
No, that just wouldn’t work!
I’m a reporter and I report the facts
But these three dead in such a short time-
Let’s ask Lestrade, see how he reacts!
Lestrade, Is suicide even a crime?
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I commented on this work earlier but I decided why not write a review? So here I am! First of all like I said earlier I love this, I think you represented this episode very well in the dialogue of the news reporter. I like how it slowly escalates as you write each headline. A few things I noticed, first of all here. I also love the usage of rhyme in this.
I don't think this makes sense. Since this seems to unfold instead of the reporter talking about past events he would have no reason to suspect further suicides like this so I'm not sure why he would say The first suicide.
I don't think is should be capitalized but if it's your writing style than ignore this. Overall great work! I love the use of rhyme and the way this unfolded and the way you portrayed this episode. You know what? I just love everything about this. Wonderful work! I hope to see more of this Sherlock musical!
Thank you so much!
AAAAAHHHHH!!! IK THIS EPISODE!!! ITS THE ONE WITH THE
TAXI DRIVER!!!!
Spoiler
the above is a spoiler btw
YESS! A STUDY IN PINK!!
the very first ep, it's so good right lmao
Oh wow. Oh WOW. STILL LOVING THIS. SO MUCH.
What really amazes me is how well you wrote the episodes so well into songs. I find it really hard to write a song about any topic and have it sound good. You accomplish that, and it sounds amazing! If you wouldn't mind, when you post these, please tag me so I don't miss them!
There were a few grammatical errors that I wanted to point out, so here you go!
The quotation here is a little wrong, so let me correct it!
"He wouldn't have done this," his mother cried
Berserk doesn't need to be capitalized here.
Same thing with Is.
That's it! Great job with this; I can't wait to read/listen to more!!
Momo
thank you so much! and thanks again for pointing out the grammatical errors for me! My writing partner had to edit the WHOLE original script for the episode so it would fit a stage show and then we turned each 'scene' into a song which is quite fun to do