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The shock on Brooke's face was golden. She took another sip of her 352 calorie PinkBerry smoothie and tried to seem uninterested. I hid the smile on my face as she asked her next question.
"Um, d-do you know what it said?"
I faked a sombre look. Of course I did! Doesn't mean Ms. Queen Bee has to know she can find out from some freshman or something. I giggled a little and Brooke's look of confusion brought me back to reality.
"No, I really don't. It's so sad. I know you and her had history and stuff," I said, the last part lowered to a whisper in case someone important heard and thought Brooke was weird or something. I mean, yeah, she was the most popular girl in school, a title she deserved, but if anyone heard that she was friends with some freak who killed herself, then well, she might as well go hang out with Druggies now.
Okayy...this is a intriguing start. For one I love how we're thrust right into the middle of what seems like a pretty serious conversation right here from the context we're getting at the moment. Things are certainly proving to be very interesting with what we've got at the moment, and all in all, this is telling us quite a bit about the kind of dynamic the characters have and getting us invested as well.
Brooke ducked her head down and whispered to me.
"Look, don't tell anyone that I was friends with her."
I smiled to her sweetly, thinking about how I was going to spread that without it being traced back to me. It would be nice to have Ms. Got-It-All feel the scorn of her peers for once.
"Of course not, Brooke. I'm so sorry for your loss." I put my hand on her arm during the last part. She shook me off and got a bitchy look on her face.
"It's not my loss. We weren't even friends. We haven't talked since 8th grade and she was a freak anyway." She said in a fierce tone.
Even I was shocked at her pissy attitude. She just insulted someone who was dead. Someone who would be alive if she hadn't been such a bitch to her. Well, according to the note anyway.
Ohh, well now that makes things even more complicated, at first I thought this was something a lot more minor, but now it seems we're dealing with some sort of potential and now the tone with which this is all going down feels like its perhaps not quite as serious as it should be. Well, this is certainly taking some interesting turns at any rate.
"Whatever, Brooke." I said resignedly. The bell began to ring and the entire homeroom began to get up to go to first period. I stood, fixed my skirt and started to walk away when Brooke grabbed my arm.
"It's not my loss, Marianne."
I gave her a soft smile and walked out of the classroom, already thinking about what, who and when to say the secret that would ruin Brooke's rep for all the time she stays at Alton Prep Academy.
Well, this seems like a very unhealthy relationship for the both of them judging by how that particular situation went. It looks like things are shaping up for a rather tumultuous plot here and I think in that sense, this ending is quite cause you do find yourself wanting to read on and find out more. However, overall, I feel like you need to be thinking a teensy bit more in terms of making this whole death situation a little bit more serious and impactful there.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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