How do you make poems sound exactly like Early-Modern English so effortlessly? Personally, I find it hard to pull this well from my own experience. But you did it wonderfully! On to the review 
Stanza 1
O sweet desire, thou art a fickle flame,
A force that doth both bless and curse our days,
Thou art a fire that we cannot tame,
A passion that doth drive us in so many ways.
You set the tone of the poem by describing desire as fickle, a blessing, a curse, and an undying passion. By the kind of words you are using, I can imply that the narrator has had some bitter experience with desire, calling it a blessing and a curse. They are trying to appear neutral, but they cannot as it shows in the next stanza.
Stanza 2
When we desire that which we cannot attain,
Thou art the cause of our unending pain,
And though we may resist thy sweet refrain,
Thou still dost linger like a darkened stain.
It is like forbidden fruit. When we desire something we cannot have, it causes us bitterness and pain because we know we can never have it or once we have it we will be ruined. But that is what makes desire so dangerous. Put it in the wrong place and you will be set for heart ache.
Stanza 3
We seek to quell thy burning flame,
And find the peace that comes with rest,
But thou art like the wind, forever untamed,
A restless force that doth our hearts infest.
Once it is ignited it cannot be stopped. Yes, this is an accurate way to describe desire. When we try to quell the flame, it only grows stronger and stronger…
Stanza 4
Oh, Desire thou art a fickle friend,
That blesses and curses with equal measure,
Yet, we cannot help but seek thee till the end,
For thou art at the very essence of life's pleasure.
What a wonderful conclusion to this poem! It says that desire is indeed both a blessing and a curse. Yet it is inevitable for us humans who seem to be programmed to truly desire something and to take pleasure in it. For if desire is in the right place, every thing good will follow.
Overall, this is an amazing reflective poem. It objectively shows both sides of desire, the good and the bad, although most of the poem shows its darker qualities. It is as wonderful as a deep analysis on a certain topic. Bravo!
This is alpacaboss, signing off.
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