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Thanks for the positive feedback everyone! The idea is that only people born within the city limits during a certain generation get the "freak side." Most people in Flippen either weren't born their, weren't born in the generation, or specifically went on a vacation when they were expecting their baby so the kid wouldn't be unusual. I'm pretty sure that these four, Melody, Phillip, Andy, and Nora are the only ones with the freak side. Maybe there's a few that have less obvious freak sides or a few that are in high school or something. I haven't asked my friend. Some things get explained a little later, in the next chapter.

Hi JdoggyGirl,

Mailice here with a short review!

An exciting story rendered with a great narrative perspective. I think you have a very nice and calm writing style. I like how you get straight to the point with the introduction. The way Melody talks about herself is good and I also like the way she sometimes adds a comment to the narrative as the action progresses.
It's also great that you know a bit about the people Melody is with and that you get to know a bit of her everyday life.
You've written a good introduction with the first chapter, which gives the reader exactly the most important information.

I slipped into the Burrygrate Junior High lunch room, speed walking to the small table in the back corner with my head angled downward, hoping one would notice me.

Phillip is what most people call a humanoid, with the body of a thirteen-year-old boy, but the face of a fox. The only feature on his head that wasn't fox-like was the tuft of blonde hair on his forehead. And like always, Phillip wore a long-sleeved shirt and sweatpants, no matter the day. To be fair, the weather's always sweat-shirt weather here.

I like the title The Cursed Generation i think its a good title/name because it kinda gives the reader a sense of confusion on whats going to happen but it also gives them an idea that like the generation is different then the other normal generations! I also honestly think that throughout the story you can add bits and pieces of like her back story/origin story. so like this is a fantasy book another suggestion is that you could make this like a prolog and write a chapter that is a flashback from like the beginning of the school year or from like when she moved there. also if you did like a profile for melody and the other characters and just have that off to the side to have an idea of what she looks and thinks like. I'm also writing a book but my book is way different than this in the terms of "a strange little town" mine is more like 3 realms each with a different race/kind of people. In one realm there are demons. in another there are hybrids, shifters, and elementals. In the third realm there are the angels and fallen angels. My main characters name is Darkheart and she is a demon, angel, and wolf shifter. but there's a twist she has a curse on her placed by her younger brother that is in her quadruplet and later on he goes and poisons their parents who later die after she tries to heal them using magic. Which sends her into a downward spiral where she almost kills herself but is stopped by her *spoiler* soulmate Alex. Soon after Darkheart starts to come out of her depression and smiles and seems to come to life for the first time in 3 years after her parents deaths. about 6 months after Alex askes Darkheart to be his girlfriend. everything is great until its not when the
curse takes effect. Alex driven by rage at his brother Axel who is also in love with her takes
action and kisses Darkheart. with this new found rage Alex kills Axel. he denies the realization that he killed his younger twin brother and blames it on Darkheart. this hurts Darkheart and she flees after alex attempts to kill her but is pulled off by his younger brothers Andrew and Asher. this sends Darkheart back into a downward spiral but its worse this time she succeeds in killing herself. Seeing her parents expressions she realizes that she has to fight this and face Alex.

One of my close friends came up with this story idea, and she's gotten at least 5 of us helping with writing and refining it. We haven't been able to come to an agreement on whether it should be called the Cursed Generation (my suggestion) or the Cursed Children (My friends'). I think Cursed Generation mainly because there are so many books out there by that same name (most notably the Harry Potter one). The chapters flip from character to character, and Melody is the mainest of the four main characters. Nora, Melody's younger sister, gets kidnapped for being special, and the three others have to get her back. I think at this point no one except my friend fully knows where this story is going, and I think it's amazing! She would add a few paragraphs, and then we would go over the whole story again, finding little itty bitty things to change. The first chapter, then, has been gone over the most. Most of the other chapters aren't as well written quite yet, but they're getting there. The chapters are pretty short, but we have 9 done, and a tenth on the way. Any suggestions?