Hey EverLight! Katja here to review your poem. As always please feel free to disregard any comments or suggestions I make if you find them unhelpful. That being said, let's get into this review~
Overall Thoughts
I really enjoyed reading this poem which tells of a love for someone who has done a great good in the eyes of the narrator. The narrator wishes this person to feel their love despite never having met them. Very fantasy-like poem with a superhero-admirer feel to it~
Suggestions
I suggest breaking the poem into stanzas at the repetition of "Dear stranger in the stars"
but I have too, have sacrificed for the stars
Here, you can remove "have" altogether or reword it as "I have also sacrificed for the stars"
whereever
This should be "wherever"
That's all I Have for suggestions!
Summary
Your poem is very nicely done and the narrative itself reminds me of a movie or just overall fantasy story where a superhero's deeds draws admiration and the admirer wrote this poem for the superhero- if that makes sense. I think it's very cute and poetic for sure. I especially like the final line where the narrator hopes for their love to be with the person they admire. Well done!
I hope my review was helpful,
Keep Writing,
~Katja
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