Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on this lovely day, I will also try to help get your work out the green room.
Let's get started.
So as I was reading this I saw you don't have very much punctuation, so I think you might want to put some more in, it will also help with the flow a bit.
Well now that's done let's talk about the good things.
Even if you didn't have much punctuation I still think the flow was nice, and it was still easy to read. I saw that some of your words rimed, and that was really fun to read. I also saw some of them didn't but that's fine it kind of made this poem different to the others.
I thought the length of the poem was great, just long enough to get all the feelings and emotions that you want to get across, across. I think if it was any shorter i don't think it would have worked as well.
When I saw the name to the poem I new I had to come read it, it was like pulling me in, and that is what you are looking for in a title. Well that's what I think.
Again amazing job, this was written really well. And I'm glad I got the chance to read and review it for you. I hope you will never stop writing and keep posting really good works out on YWS. Have a great day or night.
Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
Reviewing with a fiery passion.
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