Young Writers Society

Thanks for apologi- No JK this inst for me

HELLO EMERALD HERE FOR THE REVIEWS!!!

First off... I just want to point out that (I have said this before) I don't really read allot of poetry, but when I do I always find a little gem like this. I also just love how this is for someone that you hurt, that's really kind <3

I cant find any nitpicks so everything in this story I think is just fine
I think my favorite lines are the last few.

ALSO,
I hope who this was for gets the chance to read this, If there is ANY chance I can help to get this to the person your trying to apologize to, EMAIL ME AT linkmyers@ymail.com

Hi there, silverlady99. To start off, your poem is good. It's a general idea we're all used to: love. Therefore, it's easy to understand the feelings described and all that. I would say if you used rhyme throughout the whole poem it would have made it much better. And the ending:
"So I'll end this rhyme with 'I love you'
And a kiss that will find its way to you."
Well, how can I put this? It doesn't seem to fit so well. Try better word usage perhaps. And just a heads-up; it should be "its" and no apostrophe.

-B

Poetry is a way to say many more things with the help of few words or sentences and you done it perfectly. Through this poetry you catch the actual emotion and felling of a loving body. It is dedicated to those people who felt in love with someone special but due to some misunderstanding they got slam. That’s why it is vary closer to my heart. Thanks for writing this kind of poetry. I heartily appreciate your writing skill, Keep it up.
:-Shubham

BOOM *Appears in a dramatic flash of smoke*

I hope that whoever this poem was dedicated to gets to read it, because wow! If I were them, I'd say apology accepted. I can see the effort and the care and the emotion you put into this. The rhyme scheme and meter are consistent, which means this poem has perfect flow and rhythm. That's hard to achieve, and I appreciate it. It's short but eloquent. It expresses a lot in a few words, and even taken out-of-context I can feel the raw emotion you put into this. If it's hard to achieve a perfect rhythm, it's even harder to get so much across in so little length. Bravo, my friend, bravo! And your last stanza was the best of all, I have to say.

Keep smiling, forgive yourself, and as always, keep writing.
-ladcat13

"I don't know what else to say,
Because " I'm sorry " is starting to seem so lame."
That line, oh my gosh. So many love poems (*cough* like mine *cough*) are so sappy and cheesy. But you turned a sappy love poem into something worth reading. That line, in particular caught my eye.
Anyways, just thought I'd say, I really love your poem!

~Nora