Knight r4 here to review this work. I know that you don't want this work to be reviewed, and you don't have to take my advice, but if you are going to post something it appears in the Green Room so I am obliged to clear it out as a knight of the Green Room. Please don't take offense or anything. I am not trying to spite you or anything like that. Hope this helps. 
I noticed that you had certain words in blue like a link. I am not quite sure why. Is it supposed to indicate something such as an accent or what? Please let me know.
One thing I noticed is that you have virtually no punctuation of any kind. That indicates that that this is one long sentence. Though, I must say, that is probably one of the longest sentences I have ever seen 
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I am not sure if this was supposed to be funny or not, but you need to shorten it a little.You always wore a mask which was your mascot named 'Sup Guy'
I noticed that these two punctuation marks comprised half of the punctuation in the entire sentence. But ironically I think that the comma should be replaced by an and.Can you show me your face, Cry?
Overall this was pretty well written. I am not quite sure what the purpose of the poem was, though I think that I might be a romance poem. It kind of had that flavor to it.
The only thing I thought you could do a little better on overall, aside from the punctuation, was make the poem flow a little better, and have a little more structure than you had.
Again I hope this helps you, and I hope that you aren't upset about me reviewing this. Like I said I am not trying to be mean, though as Bicuits said, "the whole point of YWS is to review." So for you to tell people not to review is A) taking points away from them that they could earn to use for publishing their own works and B) discouraging them from doing their duty to KotGR. I hope you aren't offended. Happy writing!!!
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