Hey there, jls1638! This a pretty good poem, and I feel as if I can relate to it a lot, especially on some of those really bad days. I like the fact that this is a free verse poem because it helps this kind of poem flow more. Although, there is no punctuation, except for the question mark after line eight, which doesn't really go with the rest of the poem. I think that there should be commas and periods in this, but not too many of them. Other than those few little things, this is a great poem. Four out of five.
Hasta la vista,
DeltaEcho
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