Hello There! Scarlet here too review!
First off I love the emotional reference put into this poem.
I do have a few nitpicks though.
NITPICKING TIME!!!
My anger takes form --->
(This part I feel throws off the balance of the poem. Maybe try something like.
'My blood begins to boil' or 'My anger begins to manifest' I believe would sound better.)
Anger fills my veins,--->
This also throws off the poem a bit. Maybe try something like,
'Rage begins to build inside my veins' or 'Rage fills my veins' changing that first word anger, too something with the same meaning would make it sound more professional.
Other than that there are no grammar or punctual mistakes that I see.
This poem was emotional and meaningful to you. It came from personal experience and I loved how you put that down into a poem.
Great Job!
Sincerely, @ScarletDreams14; Member of Salsa Verde
Writer, Artist, Student and Reader
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