I have scars where I only see,
And I've grown skinnier each week
I'm getting worse,
And I'm not sure how much longer I can go...
I've become a pro at lying,
saying "I'm fine",
Then I'll go home crying,
I just don't know what to do.
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Come hold me,
say that you'll love me,
even at the end,
Just make me feel like I don't want to die tonight...
-
I see a therapist each week,
Mentally unstable,
yeah that's me,
just let that sink in...
I'm not perfect,
I'm only human,
I bleed,
And I feel like my heart's been stabbed repeatedly.
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So, Come hold me,
Say that you'll love me,
even at the end.
Just make me feel like I don't want to die tonight...
-
Now I think I've had enough,
I can't go on this way,
broken, hopeless, and afraid...
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But then you held me,
you said that you'll love me
even at the end...
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As you hold me,
you love me,
even at the end.
And now I don't feel, like I wanna die tonight.
-Kamryn- 6/1/13
(excuse my voice.)
HERE'S A RECORDING-
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0chZkPVBViJ
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Hey Lylas! Strange here and I have a review for you!
I have a different take on these lyrics than others, because I have a weird mindset, but it doesn't stop me from saying that I like it.
I feel like the narrator needs attention to herself. She needs attention, as she is mentally unstable. Without someone there for her, she is going to go crazy. I guess, the narrator is lonely. With someone there, she feels safe. Now, if this wasn't lyrics and if someone actually said this, I would complain. I would say something like "You don't have a mental problem" and that bull crap. If, for some reason, these lyrics were bad, I would say something like that, but this hits home with the reader along the lines of "We all need someone in our life". I like how you generally address, and I enjoyed reading this poem.
Overall, pretty good job.
Strange gives you...
7.9/10
Good job
Keep writing
Stay groovy, my friend
You've clearly nailed it.
Instead of writing a review I thought, uh... why not do a little mastering and mixing, some noise removal to the audio and add some reverb to the voice.
Your audio was probably recorded on a simple mic, so this is the best filtering that I could do -
http://www.filesnack.com/files/ctk3g5am
Enjoy!
Thank you!
ah it's nothing, you're welcome
just keep on singing *thumbs up*
http://vocaroo.com/i/s0chZkPVBViJ
Rather, the recording...(Or copy and paste the one above)
it's amazing ...i love it
do you post on youtube or something?if so, give me a link, i'd love to listen
I used to, then my parent's got freaked out thinking that people were stalking me, so they made me erase all my videos >.>
ohhh