Hello, Omnom! It's Vilnius here with a review.
My first impression is that this has something to do with someone close to you-- a grandparent, perhaps? There's just emotion written into this piece that is hard to do without thinking about some great heartbreak in one's life.
I think your poem would be a little better if you broke up the lines a little differently so there wasn't one word sitting alone in the first three stanzas.
Overall, I really like this poem. It was a good read, and I felt some emotions I haven't felt in a while.
Have a nice [*insert time of day here*] and have a nice #RevMo !!!
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