Hellooo its Tiny here!
I've pointed out all my favorite parts because I think the others have agreed that this poem is utterly perfect.
Yesterday was cracked
----Her heart is tipsy----
And her mind is packed
“Mommy! Mommy! Mommy”
Her life is it's fact
Slippin' low
“Hey, look here, ho!”
Too skinny from
The sticky smoke
----But he's an old bloke
Looking to cheat
On his faithful wife---- (really shows what kind of a man this person is)
But he's messing
With her son's precious life
----Giving meat to his bones
Every time he pays----
Her to sin
And on those days
She teaches her well-fed son
Why one can't steal
----He breathes in
He believes in---- (I just can't put down how much this works for the poem)
Strange men lies
And he relies
On the strange man
----Man relies on Mamma
And Mamma relies on the can
Teaching her son
How to be a man.----(just sums up the poem beautifully)
Stay classy
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