Hi Rishabh!
I am here again after reviewing your other poem!
okay , its a good poem and it conveys how angry you are about the Indian politics XD.
Even I am an Indian , and to be honest seriously there is no point in writing poem on Indian politics because its never going to improve! but anyway I like the poem the way you have showed the dirty politics being played in the Indian democracy.
there are again few grammatical errors in the poem
'Why young crowd is sitting idle'
there should be a question mark at the end of the line above and some editing work is required, you can also frame it like this
"why is the young crowd sitting idle?'
I just loved this line the most:
'We are the power, We don't have the power'
its very sarcastic XD! that's actually true..... India says we have full rights being the citizens because we follow democracy but actually we are restricted for everything!
one more thing,
"oh my bully Politicians"
since you are taking against and behalf of the country it will be good if you change the sentence like this
"oh our bully politicians"
This sentence especially shows how furious you are about the Indian politics and I loved it!
"my words never end, my pen never stops"
''When everyone get proper ration?''
some editing work required again.
you can change it like this:
''when will everyone get proper ration?'' (Or something like that).
Otherwise I think its fine not bad just make sure you edit all the changes mentioned in this review.
its a good work and overall layout is good!
Anyway, keep up the good work!
and keep writing!!:D
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